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benthic contractions
mother earth clenches her pain
tsunami is born
© 2002 - 2019 darkphoenix
Unlike most of my other haiku, this effort was not prompted by something I saw. Instead, a word sprang to mind, and I found myself wondering what I could do with it -- and that led to this ...

Oh, and the word I originally thought of? Well, it never made the final version... ;-)

Update: For those who are wondering, the original word that got me thinking along these lines in the first place was "pelagic" (obvious really... ;-))

Edit, Jan 2004: I am currently working through my gallery and providing a " proper" preview image for those deviations that didn't originally have one. I apologise to all those watching me if this causes these old poems to be flagged as "new". The image in this thumbnail is from Sea Wave, by ~ spirit-stock.
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spiritguide's avatar
Benthic, now I learned a new word as well!

Nice piece, and thanks for the credit on my sea wave!
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darkphoenix|Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you -- and you're welcome. :D
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poetrymachine's avatar
dude... i never knew hgaiku's could be so deep... awesome. Could not be a better choice of words.
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fatelessmirror's avatar

Damn this is great! It hit me so unexpected--that is a major thing.

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versifier's avatar
wow...nice one...

So much imagery in that......thats the true embodiment of a haiku.....

Brilliant work.
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skyOrange's avatar
that is very kewl. very climactic. your haikus always make me smile.
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thelonius's avatar
im afraid in a poem of such few words the choice of those words becomes one of the primary aspects of the poem, and clenches her pain is quite akward and distracting from the rest of the poem. good idea though.
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deejbard's avatar
wonderful.
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namaste's avatar
that's an excellent haiku. tight and perceptive. +fav :) (Smile)
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hedda's avatar
that is a absolutely brilliant haiku... OMG

I am duly impressed.... I think haikus are such a difficult form - to be able to capture the essence or ideas within the structure takes talent (I keep trying at these and it is HARD)

I love the metaphor you use here... the "mother earth" and birth.... it's great..

+fav
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mastermindg's avatar
wow, thats pretty cool man. id still like to know the original word =D (Big Grin)

hey, i never knew somebody had a similar name. cool.
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windigo's avatar
I love this haiku! each word is so well chosen.
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MattSpire|Professional Digital Artist
i love this... one of the most original haikus i've read. you describe things very succinctly. i would have unnecessarily written 10 stanzas to describe this.... =p (Razz) and you said 'benthic' ... :D (Big Grin)

makin me curious as to what the original word you wanted to use was.... ;) (Wink)
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irishdrifter|Hobbyist Writer
nice imagery, great emotion
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aki's avatar
I think this goes along very well with my Dev ID....
Nice work!
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misomaniac's avatar
benthic contractions / mother earth: excellent link. I had no idea what benthic meant and was thinking about earthquakes. Dictionaries are so handy. Lacks the poetic contradiction of most haikus, though.
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themadpoet's avatar
very nicely done...i am too verbose for haiku lol...thanks for the comment
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dark-phoenix's avatar
Some nice stuff, it makes me think of a print I saw when I was in Japan. And as an added bonus, I learned a cool new word! Yay!

Well I've known about you since my first submission (someone else made the observation) but the hyphen was entirely my thought ;) (Wink) I've not really had the chance to look over much of your stuff but what I have seen is very good. I'm proud I accidently chose a name so close to yours :) (Smile)
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dr-d's avatar
crap, meant to vote on that
here ya go!
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dr-d's avatar
hmmm... benthic. is that something to do with underwater plates?
well written.

that's great you were able to discard the original word. My OCD kicks in when I start an idea like that, lol, I just have to use it.
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wildmonky|Student Writer
Well I had to look benthic. Obscure, I'm assuming. Maybe I'm just ignorant. :D (Big Grin)

This is a very descriptive haiku. I like it.

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