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Golden eye of God
Gazing upon His creation
Glorious to see
So titles aren't my strong point! :D At least this ties in with my last submission, more or less...

I could give a description of how this haiku came to be written, throw in an anecdote or two to describe my frame of mind -- but the description is already much longer than the poem, so I won't! :-)

For those who are wondering: yeah, I was driving to work when I "wrote" this. ;-)

Please let me know what you think...

Edit, Jan 2004: I am currently working through my gallery and providing a " proper" preview image for those deviations that didn't originally have one. I apologise to all those watching me if this causes these old poems to be flagged as "new". The image in this thumbnail is sunrise, by ~LilOompa85. I am led to believe that the kanji characters read "haiku"; if anybody knows differently, please let me know.
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Daily Deviation

Given 2003-05-09
I have a soft spot for Haiku. A form some find difficult to write is magical to read and will open its meaning as a flower does full bloom. Haiku is a "natural" for this poet, enjoy That time of day by darkphoenix (Selected by +jsenn) ( Featured by jsenn )
niimo Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2004  Hobbyist Photographer
This was somehow the first thing I clicked on in your gallery. What can I say, it seems like more than words because words alone, do nothing for the soul. Awesome.
darkphoenix Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2004  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks; glad it worked for you... ;-)
aeriyn Featured By Owner May 9, 2003
Great work, man, and congrats on the Daily Deviation! I love your poetry!
hokuto Featured By Owner May 9, 2003
Heart Very lovely haiku - I enjoyed it muchly. It feels all warm and sunny...
razureoblivion Featured By Owner May 9, 2003
This reminds me of dawn when the world is fresh, new and awash in gold beauty.

The sun beholds the glory of the world again after a night of mystery.

This doesn't take you by surprise, and doesn't offer what vine (#2) says "a startling revelation," but I think it's best the way it is. The haiku opens your mind slowly and wondrously and it still leaves the reader with that soft caress of amazement and fulfillment.

Very well written.
mastermindg Featured By Owner May 9, 2003
rapid and moving. congrats and nice poem.
dreamheaven Featured By Owner May 9, 2003
Fantastic work, it just rolls off the tongue :) (Smile)
tmpst24myst Featured By Owner May 8, 2003  Student Writer
this is poetry i can learn from.
fatelessmirror Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2002

You are right, titles are not your thing, but they do add that new level to haiku's you couldn't obtain otherwise.

jsenn Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2002
Yes, my dear man, you are truly one of the best haiku writers here. This is wonderful.
jHeart y
vannova Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2002
Its flowing.. short and full of positive emotions. Words formed to a powerful verse.
I like it alot!


-[ VanNovA ]-

kindsage Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2002
Three lines evoking more than a thrillion emotions!
I presume it to be inspired rather than "written"?

Glorious indeed mah friend!

i love Jesus Christ with all my heart.
levite Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2002   Artist
:D (Big Grin) I never knew... what wonderful and simple words. Dark a poet? you are going on my watchlist dude...
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rebelchic Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2002
short and sweet...i like :P (Razz)
vine Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2002
Haiku are more difficult than at first
they would appear. I'm sure you agree.

Since you've chosen to use the traditional
5-7-5 (Western tradition, anyway), I'd suggest
the poem also include, incorporate a startling
revelation. As it reads now it seems a little
tame. You probably disagree, but I thought I'd
offer an opinion other than an observation;
alliteration, indeed.

Be well...

dr-bbg Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2002
weeeeee. alliteration.
The destruction of words is a beautiful thing.
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