I've been reading your story and I'm enjoying so far.
I was planning on reading it, I promise:3
I think I may know the issue here
Perhaps you should make an image of a main cover like a comic book. Most people don't like reading a lot in one go so maybe an image would change that
I'd love to but I can't draw very good. I would love it if someone would do something with the characters and settings I've made but I don't have the money to make commissions.
*hug* it's OK buddy.