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In this lowly bed
we toss and turn like ships caught
in a private storm.

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The grieving lover
curls around his hollowed chest
and prays for morning.

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Like a moth to flame,
you will burn beneath my touch
to know me just once.

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No voice is sacred
when even words scrape at flesh
like greedy fingers

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Sheets hold your fever
long after you've turned away
forsaking solace.

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The beast devours
flesh and bone, never sated;
meanwhile his beauty starves.
Haiku word vomit for you.

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Arryka Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2010
absolutely love it, it sounds so brooding.
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darkelvenmage Featured By Owner May 3, 2010
Why thank you, my dear!
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Shairese Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
*On the last haiku, the bottom line has 6 syllables. Or maybe that's just me counting weird.

Anyhow, very lovely. They seem to tie in together somehow. Not with a common theme, but with a perfect flow, like a good song. I especially love the line "when even words scrape at flesh". Awesome.
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darkelvenmage Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2010
Ah, thank you! I'm glad you liked them. Yeah, the last line of that final haiku does sound like it has six syllables, but I checked it with this syllable counter ([link]) and it says it has five so I left it. XD I guess it depends on how you mash the words together in your head?
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Shairese Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome. And yeah, I guess it depends on how you say them. Maybe people with different accents say it with 5 syllables. And haha wow. Never knew there was a line counter. Would have made things so much easier before. D:
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darkelvenmage Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2010
Yus. I think it's off sometimes (obviously), but it helps people who are totally inept at counting syllables. Like me. XD
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Shairese Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Rofl and me. I have to clap my hands for each word, like in elementary school.
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darkelvenmage Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2010
Ooh, that's a good idea. XD
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Shairese Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Haha yeah [:
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PotmeetKettle Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2010
I like this. I like the way you did it. Strings of haikus~. I might pick it up.
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darkelvenmage Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2010
Thank you! Yeah, I've found that haikus are a great way to relieve the stress of writer's block and things like that.
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