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Caged

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Published: April 11, 2010
In this lowly bed
we toss and turn like ships caught
in a private storm.

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The grieving lover
curls around his hollowed chest
and prays for morning.

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Like a moth to flame,
you will burn beneath my touch
to know me just once.

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No voice is sacred
when even words scrape at flesh
like greedy fingers

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Sheets hold your fever
long after you've turned away
forsaking solace.

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The beast devours
flesh and bone, never sated;
meanwhile his beauty starves.
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Arryka's avatar
absolutely love it, it sounds so brooding.
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Why thank you, my dear!
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Shairese|Hobbyist Writer
*On the last haiku, the bottom line has 6 syllables. Or maybe that's just me counting weird.

Anyhow, very lovely. They seem to tie in together somehow. Not with a common theme, but with a perfect flow, like a good song. I especially love the line "when even words scrape at flesh". Awesome.
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Ah, thank you! I'm glad you liked them. Yeah, the last line of that final haiku does sound like it has six syllables, but I checked it with this syllable counter ([link]) and it says it has five so I left it. XD I guess it depends on how you mash the words together in your head?
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You're welcome. And yeah, I guess it depends on how you say them. Maybe people with different accents say it with 5 syllables. And haha wow. Never knew there was a line counter. Would have made things so much easier before. D:
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Yus. I think it's off sometimes (obviously), but it helps people who are totally inept at counting syllables. Like me. XD
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I like this. I like the way you did it. Strings of haikus~. I might pick it up.
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Thank you! Yeah, I've found that haikus are a great way to relieve the stress of writer's block and things like that.
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