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Published: September 1, 2001
Walking - triping - falling - twisting - moving - turning - churning - burning - hurting - reaching - missing - grabing - slipping - hoping - losing - seeing - hearing - sensing - nothing - saying - singing - pleading - begging - yelling - screaming - bleeding - torturing - suffering - killing - fading - failing - dieing
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Just came in my head tonight....
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Clair's avatar
hmmm I like this poem a lot because it is very very original...strong words, and it does have a purpouse. This is awesome...i really like it.
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its looks so much better if you look at the txt file and the whole string of word , i dont really like many pomes but this is so simple and yet so orginal and moving , arg very very good

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babysista's avatar
very very VeRy nice. i applaud your deviant format and the use of not quite so many but so complimentive (is that a word?) words. it's very emo and ... wow!..

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hrm. i don't believe that i've ever seen this format before. it's powerful, but it doesn't hit me in the same intricate manner of most poetry.. but i suppose that's not the purpose..

all verbs too :) (Smile)

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