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Love, My Love, how I adore thee,
But thou hast gone, thou hast departed.
Be thee upon a steed, be thee beneath the sea?

Love, my love, how I adore thee,
But thou art a specter, thou hast vanished.
Be thee amongst the stars, be thee without the moon?

Love, my love, how I adore thee,
But thou hast perished, thou hast expired.
Be thee not alone, be thee with thy love.
Some shakespearian english, FTW!

I am a hopeless romantic...

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I love it and it really describes the scene very well and how they are feeling in the poem and how he felt . Its very touching in way that its hard to describe it . Keep up the good work and maybe do more poems and put them into a book . I have been doing that myself . Where do u get inspire from or by to write? I just wish every could feel that in the poem . good work and way to go!!


just be proud of yourself and keep at it.. I know you will do Great and love it.
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Orstrix Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this change to elizabethan era! Dont see it much these days :) I usually dont understand older poetry but i got this one :D Its a really beautiful piece and really well written. The progression from death to suicide as abyssi below said flows really nicely. I think youre spot on with this one, right length, words, flow everything :) Id love to see more from you! Keep up the good work :)
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Crissiesaurus Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!

If you really want to check out more there is a literature folder in my gallery. I'd appreciate some more feed back from you :)
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Orstrix Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
sure thing
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Abyssi-Somnis Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2013
:squee: Elizabethan-era English! I absolutely love it, not many people these days write in that style, which is a shame because it's very beautiful and poetic. You did amazing on it, too, getting the words correct. They're hard to get confused haha. It's a very short poem, some more length might be nice. But the length doesn't ruin it in the least! :) I really love the romantic words. I especially enjoy how it progressed from someone mourning the loss of a loved one to committing suicide. (I'm guessing that's what happened in the end, the last line is what made me think that.)
Amazingly well written poem, it flows very nicely. Love it! :love:
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Crissiesaurus Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:la: critique!

Thank you so much. I struggle with length, usually run out of steam at 400-500 words for short stories and around 80 for poetry. It's something I have to work on.

And yus, she committed suicide in my mind, but I like to leave it up for interpretation. Maybe he loved his dog?
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Abyssi-Somnis Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2013
Lol. Ah I see. I'm exactly the opposite, I just write and write and write XD. Cool :3
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Kaiuchamica Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
nice
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Crissiesaurus Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:] thank you
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Kaiuchamica Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
you welcome
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