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Supercat vs Dogzilla! by Creative-Caro Supercat vs Dogzilla! by Creative-Caro
Hello everybody!
I present you proud and nervous my very first manga or dojinshi with only two pages! That is short I know but I really really really really really hope that he is even a little bit funny or cute >.<

you have to read him from the right to the left side!

And please help me! I need as much as criticism as you can give me :blush: I want to improve myself so bad so please write me some comments or critics about everything that comes to your mind..
How do you think about the brightness- is it to dark?
Do you like the panels and could you "read" them in a nice and right order?
How do you think abot the figures and the small story?
What do you think about the perspective and so on!

I would be so glad about your words :tears:


You can find me and my other work on Tumbler: creative-caro.tumblr.com/
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Zuerst einmal Glückwunsch zu Deinem ersten Comic.
Was mir besonders auffällt ist, dass die Figuren steif wirken. Dadurch dass einige Gebäude schief und grau sind geht meines Erachtens viel Klarheit und Tiefe flöten. Etwas mehr Kontrast wäre da gut gewesen.
Auf der ersten Seite ist mir anfangs nicht ganz klar welches Panel als erstes kommt. Aber sowas passiert auch bei geübteren Leuten schnell.
Mein Vorschlag wäre eine weiße Umrandung um Super-Cat auf dem Haus stehend. So kann die Aufmerksamkeit besser gelenkt werden.
Zeichentechnisch gibt es sonst eigentlich nicht viel zu meckern. Die Rasterung beim Himmel finde ich gut. Etwas Schatten würde dem Ganzen noch etwas mehr Tiefe geben.
Das die Menschen nur als Strichmännchen gezeichnet sind, sei dir verziehen (im Grunde ist es ganz witzig)
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AuraSauna Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2015  Hobbyist
That is soooo cute, first off!
Ok, so the only thing that occured to me when you asked for criticism is the lack of sound effects. Can the dog at least howl when he's falling? And maybe the cape flaps when the cat is posing? 
Other than that, loved it Clap 
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Creative-Caro Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2015  Student General Artist
oh wow thank you! When I drew it.. I totally forgot about this!
But I am also glad you like it!
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AuraSauna Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2015  Hobbyist
yeah, I got real excited when I read it. You should definitely draw more Aww 
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TriniDarkieGirl4EVA Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Creative-Caro Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2014  Student General Artist
:meow:
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TriniDarkieGirl4EVA Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
It might be funnier if you add words^^
DOGZILLA: What? defeated by a cat?
SUPERCAT: That's Super Cat to you, mister!
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Creative-Caro Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2014  Student General Artist
yeah, but english isn´t my first language.. so I would be ashamed when there are mistakes in the text or jokes that nbody understands because of my bad english >.<
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TriniDarkieGirl4EVA Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I'll help you if you like :)
Besides, people who speak German (I know quite a few) would love to see another artist of their native land :D
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Creative-Caro Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2014  Student General Artist
hm you are right.. when I plan the next one I will ask you about it again :meow:
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TriniDarkieGirl4EVA Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
YAY!!!
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FruitnCreme Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Student Digital Artist
i don't read manga so i can't really give any advice,but.....

daaawwww... :b
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Creative-Caro Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Student General Artist
ahw :meow:
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FruitnCreme Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Student Digital Artist
aww :love:
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starmoon2000 Featured By Owner May 7, 2014
well first off it looks amazing. the shading could have been a bit more but i also like as this. but i would love to have some colors sure black and white is awesome but i would love to see how it would look in color(my opinion). the cat is amazing ( maybe a little idea you can take the cat and make it a house cat who is actually a supercat and he will have a lot of adventures everyday and so. but when he is home he is lazy. if you do this make them short and cute like this) 
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Creative-Caro Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Student General Artist
haha :D you guess my future plans with supercat! That was kind of how I wanted him to be and thank you so much for this great impression!
I will do some color versions with supercat soon and I hope I can make my future comic sides more
unflustered
:meow:
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starmoon2000 Featured By Owner May 7, 2014
lol i can read your mind :-o. and i would love to see that. :)
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Creative-Caro Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Student General Artist
you are incredible :D  I will do my best!
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starmoon2000 Featured By Owner May 7, 2014
lol. good luck:)
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LiteralBanana Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Hey! That's a very cute and pretty done comic you have here.

First thing which comes into my mind is that the panels are not placed in a comfortable way. It's hard to lead the eye correctly through the first(bottom right) panels.

It would be very nice to see some dialogue or more dynamic posing with an expression.

Anyway, keep up the good work!
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Creative-Caro Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you so much for taking the time for the comment!
I thought that it might be to difficult for me to do some text in my first comic, because it seems to be difficult wth the speechbubbles to me >.<
But my next one will be with text and hopefully better panels and more dynamic! thank you :huggle:
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LiteralBanana Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! Keep drawing! :D Looking forward for your next work. :)
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Creative-Caro Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you so much for the watch!  :meow: I will do my best!
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delPuertoSisters Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Cool, love it! :D
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Creative-Caro Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you so much, that means a lot to me :love:
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delPuertoSisters Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome! 
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