Hello everybody! I present you proud and nervous my very first manga or dojinshi with only two pages! That is short I know but I really really really really really hope that he is even a little bit funny or cute >.<
you have to read him from the right to the left side!
And please help me! I need as much as criticism as you can give me I want to improve myself so bad so please write me some comments or critics about everything that comes to your mind.. How do you think about the brightness- is it to dark? Do you like the panels and could you "read" them in a nice and right order? How do you think abot the figures and the small story? What do you think about the perspective and so on!
That is soooo cute, first off! Ok, so the only thing that occured to me when you asked for criticism is the lack of sound effects. Can the dog at least howl when he's falling? And maybe the cape flaps when the cat is posing? Other than that, loved it
well first off it looks amazing. the shading could have been a bit more but i also like as this. but i would love to have some colors sure black and white is awesome but i would love to see how it would look in color(my opinion). the cat is amazing ( maybe a little idea you can take the cat and make it a house cat who is actually a supercat and he will have a lot of adventures everyday and so. but when he is home he is lazy. if you do this make them short and cute like this)
haha you guess my future plans with supercat! That was kind of how I wanted him to be and thank you so much for this great impression! I will do some color versions with supercat soon and I hope I can make my future comic sides more unflustered
Thank you so much for taking the time for the comment! I thought that it might be to difficult for me to do some text in my first comic, because it seems to be difficult wth the speechbubbles to me >.< But my next one will be with text and hopefully better panels and more dynamic! thank you