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Published: December 12, 2012
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Critique for :icondarkflame75: on their piece, "Never Forgotten"

...Looking at it some more.. I'd also move her tail so it's more droopy. This would help convey her sad emotions, as well as break the parallel it currently has with the horizon line.
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FizzGryphon's avatar
FizzGryphon|Professional Digital Artist
Wow, this is an amazing critique!
Although I have to say, I prefer the sky showing less.  It makes the peice darker, drabber, and a bit more depressing to me.  Then again, I might just be weird that way.
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frong's avatar
All these changes make sense, except for taking out the tree. I didn't think the tree was causing any problems, nor did it seem pointless to me at all. Burying a lost loved one beneath a tree is a classic literary element that never really gets old, IMO, so I'd leave that in. Everything else that's been altered is a nice improvement.
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PonyRelated's avatar
Just removing the tree really helped. My eye instantly went from her shoulder, at first glance, to her face. From the start of her tail over feels really empty. There is no more mountainous background and seemingly nothing between her tail and her back legs. All and all, the finished product was really good.
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Bento-Box-Art|Hobbyist General Artist
no offense but I think i like the origional better. It just felt like it was more of a scene rather than an image with a backdrop. The end result just feels too empty.
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elgregorPL's avatar
Yeah, critiques! I love them.

But removal of the tree made it look weird at first glance. IDK why.
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CosmicUnicorn's avatar
Just a drastic change--emphasized by the fact that I raised the top of the canvas while lowering the horizon.
...suddenly... sky!

:p
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anzul's avatar
canterlot castle FAR away in the BG would have been nice :V

saying it because at first i though those rocks were the castle and it made for a good sense of... far-away-ness? lonelyness?
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DarkFlame75|Professional General Artist
Actually, those rocks were the castle.

I didn't do a good job emphasizing that.
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anzul's avatar
heh... maybe my mind just filed in the blanks :)
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Atvana's avatar
I had to favourite it just because you make such valid points. A beautiful image from the start, and beautiful critique as well!
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rumblealex|Hobbyist Digital Artist
Well holy crap.

I'll just write down all those little details I should check whenever I draw something .. Damn.. There's just so much we can learn from a single explanation!
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DarkFlame75|Professional General Artist
This is absolutely incredible. So many good tips here. Thanks a LOT for this input!

Also, I laughed at "glowy booger."
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