sharkbate622's avatar
A little something that I written last night for a writing project I'm working on but not quite sure how it sounds. It takes place after a parent has picked up her little one and placed him against / over her shoulder. All he could see was part of her neck, shoulder and part of her head, face as well as what was in front of him 
DeZaaden's avatar
AM I right, that you want to tell a story from the view of a child, which is carried on the chest of the parent? Like this www.mini-and-me.com/wp-content…
sharkbate622's avatar

yes you are, it is from the 3rd person

DeZaaden's avatar
Wait, 3rd person from the POV of the child? Not quite sure, what you want to tell.-
sharkbate622's avatar

Like in Rugrats for example as from time to time we see things from the kids POV such as them being lifted up by one of the grown ups or in the game among the sleep where the mother picks up the toddler along with something along the lines of this Smiling Mother Holding Baby High-Res Stock Photo - Getty Images.

DeZaaden's avatar
Sounds interesting, and the rest depends on the actual story.
saartha's avatar
It's difficult to tell what you're really trying to do with such a small blurb, but my initial thought was 'so all he could see was...pretty much everything?'

If you're trying to describe that his vision was blocked, maybe mention the things he could no longer see.