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What's on the menu?

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Created with the inkpad app for iPad.
mlp:fim (c) Lauren and Hasbro,
art by me.
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:iconcoltsteelstallion:<grazing is pretty normal for ponies ya know.
:iconrarityshockedplz:<wha..wha...whaaat!!!

I still wonder if the ponies in equestria actually graze like normal equines. It's just something silly to think about ;) 
They do eat flowers,though, so why not.

I'm not really proud of the background in this one. Mostly backgrounds isn't really my thing to do but I really disliked it this time :( 
Ah..well, can't be perfect. At least it has my two favorite characters in it (I just love applejack)  

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I'm open for critiques again. If you feel like giving critiques to my comic then please feel free to do so. Should I do something better or do I totally suck. I leave it all up to you.

Thank you. 

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Master Brohoof!!!
:iconmushroomcloudplz::iconelectricbrohoof1plz::iconelectricbrohoof2plz::iconmushroomcloudplz:

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Das-Cool-222's avatar
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A great comic to read, and defiantly worth looking at in the end.

Vision: 5
This comic is a VERY good looking comic, with bright colors that match the mood and feeling, and great character choices (even with just 3 ponies.)

Originality: 5
Every time I criticize for originality, I think of different comics like this. For this comic here, I cant find anything I have seen similar to it (excluding the AJ & Rarity combo comics, but who hasn't done that?)

Technique: 4.5
This certain way the comic is laid out is plain and simple, making it an easy read. Nothing really complicating, though the speech bubbles were confusing at times.

Impact: 5
Definitely worth reading, makes me glad that I came here and even makes me enjoy giving feedback. Not much to say here!

Overall: 5 stars!
Worth reading, had me smile and had me laughing in the end, an amazing way of grabbing the characters personalities, and fits everything that people would expect it to! Keep up the good work!
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This is a really funny comic. Everything it well drawn and the whole thing is funny. I love the shading of your art and Rarity's face in the fourth panel is priceless. I did found Doge and Tetris is there too and I busted out laughing and feel out of my chair. Derpy looks so adorable cutting the grass (well she always looks adorable but yeah).
I have nothing else to say but I need to fill the rest of the space so I am just going to continue this sentance until it is finished and I am almost. DONE!
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YO HO ITS CAILLOU WANNA MESS ITS IN THE BAILLOU YO HO ITS ITS ITSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS great comic. sssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss ss s s s s s s s s s s s s s kf fkjh fhjkf hjk hgjkf hgkjfhgkjfh gkfhg kfhg kjfhg kjfh gkjhfgjkfh gkjfhgkjhfkhfkjg hfkjghfkjghfkjghfkjghfkj ghjkfhgjkfhgkjfhgkjfhgkjfhgkjfhg 0 0 v0 00 0 0 00 00 0 0 00 0 0 sssssssssssssssssssssssssssss fhjkf hjk hgjkf hgkjfhgkjfh gkfhg kfhg kjfhg kjfh gkjhfgjkfh gkjfhgkjhfkhfkjg hfkjghfkjghfkjghfkjghfkj ghjkfhgjkfhgkjfhgkjfhgkjfhgkjfhg 0 0 v0 00 0 0 00 00 0 0 00 0 0 fhjkf hjk hgjkf hgkjfhgkjfh gkfhg kfhg kjfhg kjfh gkjhfgjkfh gkjfhgkjhfkhfkjg hfkjghfkjghfkjghfkjghfkj ghjkfhgjkfhgkjfhgkjfhgkjfhgkjfhg 0 0 v0 00 0 0 00 00 0 0 00 0 0 fhjkf hjk hgjkf hgkjfhgkjfh gkfhg kfhg kjfhg kjfh gkjhfgjkfh gkjfhgkjhfkhfkjg hfkjghfkjghfkjghfkjghfkj ghjkfhgjkfhgkjfhgkjfhgkjfhgkjfhg 0 0 v0 00 0 0 00 00 0 0 00 0 0
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As with all your stuff, I'm absolutely in love with your original art style. Especially the second panel—Rarity looking at the screen—looks absolutely gorgeous. Maybe I'm even going to use that as cover art for something. Also, AJ's red neckerchief really adds a cute touch. 5/5

Originality is a little lacking, though that is to be expected from harmless Slice-of-Life cartoons like this one. There really isn't much to say; the gag was okay, but not the pinnacle of your work. 4/5

Technique is a double-edged sword. On one part, the visual aspect of the art itself is amazing, as I've already made pretty clear. There is literally nothing I could suggest to improve on there. The reason why I'm only giving this a 3/5 though is because of the speech bubbles. Your texts are almost always lacking a great deal of proper punctuation as well as capitalization. I'm not sure if this is because of laziness or you simply not thinking so much about it, but for me (being a dedicated fan fiction writer and editor) this is a pretty annoying thing and sadly destroys the mood a lot the time.

As such, the impact was not perfect either, leaving me with only a 3.5/5. Your incredible art style saved a lot of it, but the text bubbles need some serious work for your future work.

I'd like to point out that I'd be willing to assist you with those in case you have serious trouble with it.
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Great comic strip, great use of the character's traits and forms. It plays up both of their sides-Applejack's practicality and Rarity's wish for "exclusive" and "high class"-and it plays with it in a way that makes perfectly good sense. Art and style is very much spot on, and the joke itself is better than 70% of the stuff that the show will try to pull.

Only real complaint is that I want to see what happens next. What will Rarity do next with the knowledge that what she thought was a high-end item is so...plebeian. How will Applejack deal with Rarity's issue? And, will Derpy get paid this week for work?

Note, this are all GOOD things. It's leaving us wanting more that makes this a great strip.
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The comic in whole is a treat for the eyes and sense of homor, but let's hear about the comic in parts. For Vision, I would give this a full 5 stars. The color flows quite nicely (even with the eyes) and nothing really stands out sorely. Originality shall get a 4.5 stars. This joke has been done before, but it was done so well with the comic (as these are younger versions of Rarity and Applejack) that it gives the "Home Grown" food joke a refreshing taste. Technique get's a 4.5 stars as well. Although the talking bubbles are small enough to give the viewer more to see in the background, they still seem a bit on the small side. The white background and black text help a bit, but the speach overall could take up a few pixles more space (be not afraid! It wont ruin your comic). Impact overall is a 5/5 stars. Good Job and keep it up!!
Coltsteelstallion's avatar
Thanks a lot for the helpful info.
I'll keep it in mind for my next comic

eta-gamma-14's avatar
Sometimes the truth is better left concealed.
odnamra11's avatar
Yeah, they probably wash it rarity.
Soulflutigress's avatar
yess
*evil laughter*
MelodySwift's avatar
HOLY MOTHER I SEE DOGE ON THE HOUSE WINDOW OMG!11
brony3099's avatar
yes just yes 
Sonic2125's avatar
The ponies eat so much different food such like cupcakes, pies, pancakes etc. I forgot about the whole horses eat grass and hay thing

Used to do it a lot back in season 1

This comic is funny and genius :D
Nyysjan's avatar
Here's the thing though.
There's difference between eating salad that has been washed, and eating salad someone has walked on.
FUCK!!!
FINALLY!!!

Sorry.
It's just...
(This topic has been bugging me for so long.)
psychopathneb's avatar
rarity and her ability to not understand basic instinct
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Hacksaw606's avatar
Is that a Tower of Pimps I spy in the background on the 2nd panel?
Thompsonlk's avatar
Preach AJ Preach...
taekoos's avatar
All this time
you have been mine,
I don't know why
but it's a rhyme,
So plz don't stay
just go away,
Just go an play
with lovely clay :D
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