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sorry
i buried your best
friend in the front yard,

sorry
tulips sprung
from their caving ribs,

sorry
i lived there too.
i heard it's napowrimo

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Given 2018-05-16
(1/30) haunt. by cjoyt ( Suggested by successwithhonor and Featured by doughboycafe )
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JessaMar Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
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LostGryphin Featured By Owner May 19, 2018  Hobbyist Photographer
wow - I love the descriptions/imagery that this poem gets in very few stanzas
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cjoyt Featured By Owner May 25, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
aaa thank you so much!!
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safika987 Featured By Owner May 16, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful. Short but biting and full of emotion. The lines really hit close to home for me. Very strong poem.
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cjoyt Featured By Owner May 17, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
jeez thank you so much!!!
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Sun-Dusk Featured By Owner May 16, 2018  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ahh lucky :P
Good going on the DD!
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cjoyt Featured By Owner May 17, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!!  i've never gotten one or even thought of getting one this is wild!!
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Sun-Dusk Featured By Owner May 17, 2018  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Lol
Your welcome
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MistyW0lf Featured By Owner May 16, 2018  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow! I love this! Well deserved DD
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cjoyt Featured By Owner May 17, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
thank you thank you so much!!!!
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MEP4Photography Featured By Owner May 16, 2018  Hobbyist Photographer
Wonderful! Congratulations on your DD!
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cjoyt Featured By Owner May 17, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much!!!
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MEP4Photography Featured By Owner May 17, 2018  Hobbyist Photographer
My pleasure. 😊
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Catgirldstr11 Featured By Owner May 16, 2018
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cjoyt Featured By Owner May 17, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much aaaaa!!!!!
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Yuukon Featured By Owner May 16, 2018   Photographer
This is beautiful. Congratulations on your DD!
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cjoyt Featured By Owner May 17, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
aaa thank you this has never happened to me before???  jeez this is wild
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peaseblossoms Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2018   Writer
gahDAMN THIS BITES I LOVE IT SO MUCH
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cjoyt Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
gaaaAAAAH THANK YOU SO MUCH
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Ladnavar Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2018  Student General Artist
very nice work Clap 
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cjoyt Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!!! :heart:
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foxseason Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2018   Writer
Both sweet and dark at the same time. Really lovely :heart:
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cjoyt Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!! :heart:
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successwithhonor Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2018  Student Writer
wow.

the only edit suggestion i'd have to make would be changing the second "your" to "the" in the first paragraph. i think it would add to the flow a little bit.

stunning work
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cjoyt Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
oh, yes, that's much better!!!  thank you so much :heart:
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CarnivorousHorse Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2018  Student General Artist
yo there is a lot of ways to interpret this. Like, 'sorry/i lived there too' could mean I lived in your front yard in that grave too, I lived in those tulips, I lived in their ribs. Poem communicates a lot of loss and connection too. I always feel a lot of love in your poems. Like no matter what else happened or was done, there was love there somehow. (The angry ones not so loving, but you know what I mean)
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cjoyt Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
could have lived in the house, could have lived in the grave, or the flowers or the ribs.  coulda lived a lot of places tbh the interpretation is very open

thank you b you're the best
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CarnivorousHorse Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2018  Student General Artist
Okay, but you're also the best.

Rib gardens though ammirite?
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cjoyt Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
you are right tbh
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CarnivorousHorse Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2018  Student General Artist
*does a squat*
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StarryStarrySky7267 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
wow this sent chills down my spine! Nice work and an amazing start to NaPo! <3
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cjoyt Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!!!
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MaggiefromSpace Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2018  Hobbyist
I love how much room for interpretation this has. Might just be a pet that died, might be something much more sinister. Beautiful imge with the tulips, too!
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cjoyt Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much!!
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