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empty void feels my heart...nothingness left
where once was creative thoughts
so very cold....i feel nothing but cold....
numbing me to my very core
i try and i try.... to break free
of this hold it has on me
try as i might...it's hold is far greater
shiver goes down my spine
as the darkness closes in all around me......
light fading fast....no where to turn
no where to run.....
just the cold....the darkness
just.....nothing.....nothing left.....
trying to write....but not much coming....
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zaksplat Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2009
I think you're too harsh on yourself, replace your ... with commas and stanzas, and add a few determiners 'an' etc. and you have actually a really good piece.

Gotta say something when you write about not being able to write AND do it well :D
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cinnamongurl22 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2009
thank you,
i may just redo it now
or i may leave it as is. after all this poem
got me going again:)
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HeavenlyGateKeeper Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2009
So Very Intense & Beautifully Written
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cinnamongurl22 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2009
it really was nothing
wrote in like 5 mins
just odd thoughts
running through my head
lol
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HeavenlyGateKeeper Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2009
ah well those are the best
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cinnamongurl22 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2009
sometimes....sometimes they are just words
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HeavenlyGateKeeper Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2009
yeah sometimes
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