Paper Mario: BoA Chapter 1

Hey, Look at this!
Since a lot of you guys seem to have enjoyed my Paper Mario: The Book of Ages idea (or perhaps only the drawing, but who cares), I decided to do little pictures on each chapter during the paper adventure.
Picking up where I left off here [link] , let's continue with Chapter 1.
Mario's first objective led him out of Countdown Town and into Petunia Prairie [link] . Down the long trail, they run into a town in the shadow of an Erie castle [link] . When they get up to town, they see no one is outside, save for one buzzy beetle merchant. He confronts Mario and Goombert, and says, "You may not take my daughter you fiend!" and starts attacking Mario. After the battle, the assailant figures out you aren't the man he was seeking. the merchants name is Buzz, and he explains why all the villagers are indoors. For the resident of the neighboring castle is home to the Azure Knight Boomley [link] . He comes down every week and takes cute little girls to his castle, and if any villager refuses, the Azure Knight will blow up Petunia Village. Then, after Buzz's story, people start coming out of their houses. Then Mayor Dogour confronts Mario and begs him to get back their daughters from Boomley. And if Mario does, he'' give him the towns treasure, the Lunar Violin. Buzz, given the fact he wants to get back at Boomley for taking 3 out of his 4 daughters, wants to go with you to the Azure Castle [link] . Now having 2 companion's Mario sets off, but before they go they go get what they need to enter the castle. So Mario goes to Buzz's house and get his youngest daughter, Sunita's hat, to disguise them in making them think they're a girl. As they slip into the castle and infiltrate the labyrinth of it's catacombs, they fight off many goombas and koopas, and eventually run into the Azure Knight at the top. And with a short dialogue, they battle [link] . When the Battle is almost over, Boomley threatens to blow up, killing them both. Giving Mario only a few more turns to defeat the Knight. Whether he blows up or is defeated, it is revealed the Boomley, the Azure Knight is nothing more then a young Bomb Boo. He explains he took the girls in order to get a girlfriend. So Mario brings back the girls(one of which is the Mayors), who have been spoiled beyond belief, and Boomley, who apologies to the town folk. With that, the Mayor gives Mario the Lunar Violin. Thus triggering the "END OF CHAPTER" sequence. Then you get to control Toad and Toadette (Like you would with Peach in previous Paper Marios) who are in Countdown Town. With their story ending up telling you that the next Night Sky Instrument is in the Chucola Cola Brewery beyond the Gwah Ha Har Gorge. Now back to Mario, who is waving goodbye to the villagers. Suddenly Boomley confronts them and asks if he can join up with you so he can redeem himself. Of course, Mario agrees, so now Mario has three party members who now have one instrument out of 7.
Yep, that sums up my idea. And I'm amazed that you read the whole thing! And if you are wondering, some of my ideas before might have changed (Like how I got rid of that chef bob-omb for the Bomb Boo). And if you are wondering, since this is like Majora's Mask, you can go back in time anytime you want, and you can "redo" chapters as some side quest will need those story arcs to be complete.
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