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It was a Friday night, the moon was shining over the medium size house. Y/n was sitting on at the dinner table with her mother and father. Her father worked at the Ministry of Magic, and was telling his wife about how Lucius Malfoy was acting like a spoiled brat.
Y/n was silent and eating her carrots listening to her father. Y/n knew a little about the Malfoys, she was about 10 going on 11 tonight at midnight. She met Lucius's son, Draco once but it was when her father had brought her to the Ministry of Magic. Y/n remembered it very well. It wasn't a bad memory but it was.....awkward.


Y/n was about 8, she held her father's hand as they walked through the lobby of the Ministry. "Now Y/n please be careful don't wander off"
said her father stoking her soft hair. "Yes Daddy."

"Ah.. there you are." said a cold, bitter voice but stern. Y/n and father turned to see a man and his son, the man was tall and had long platinum blonde hair, he had a walking cane with a snake as the head. Y/n thought he looked scary then she looked at his son. He was about her height, short platinum hair like his father, it looked greased back. He had grey eyes, and pale skin.Y/n could see that you would be dumb to not see that they were father and son. "Hello Lucius..."
said Y/n's father. "have you met my son Draco?" said the man known as Lucius. Y/n looked up to Lucius then looked at his son, Draco. "So you're the Draco I hear about." Y/n's father chuckled a bit.

"This is my daughter Y/n." Y/n's father said proudly. Y/n knew that her father was proud of her. She wasn't raised like purebloods were said to be. She was raised in a home of love and kindness. To her family, blood status didn't matter, but on the another hand Y/n knew that blood status was a huge issue for the Malfoys. Y/n gave a soft smile to Draco and waved like the sweet girl she was. Draco gave her a soft smile back and waved. His eyes were soft and warm but before the smile they were cold and hard. She thought that maybe Draco needed a friend. Y/n knew that wasn't possible, her father and Lucius were not the best of friends, but like co-workers they pretended they did.Draco was looking at Y/n, he saw that she was a graceful figure of beauty. He was nervous, he never met her before but still it was just that one smile that stole his heart. Draco had a crush on Y/n but she would never know.

Flashback over.

Y/n was helping her mother wash the dishes after dinner, afterwards her went into the hallway. Suddenly a letter flew out of the box and crashes softly into Y/n's chest. Y/n looked at the letter on the address was:
Ms. Y/n  L/N
In the bedroom at the top of the stairs
682 Trebisky Rd, Flowerfull suburb

"Mom! Dad!!" Y/n said running into the living room to show her parents. Y/n gave the letter to her father. He opened it and started to
read out loud. "Dear Ms. Y/n you have been accepted into Hogwarts school of Witchcraft and Wizardry. Within this letter is the list
for your school supplies, hope to see you there. Albus Dumbledore, Headmaster."

Y/n's mother squealed with happiness, and hugged
a confused little Y/n. Her father and mother told her all about Hogwarts and said that they would get her supplies tomorrow. Y/n
rubbed her eyes after the speech and went to bed softly snoring away dreaming.

"Lucius, Draco got a letter." said Narcissa, Lucius's wife. "A letter?" said Lucius looking over the letter that his wife handed to him. Lucius chuckled, "It seems that Draco is going to Hogwarts."

Harry Potter does not belong to me, belong to J.K.Rowling!

Draco belongs to her as well

You belong to Draco 

AuraLady Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2017  Hobbyist Artist
Personally I like 3rd person... but it WAS kind of rushed for how the beginning was set up
JackFrostLover234 Featured By Owner Edited Jul 29, 2015  Student General Artist
If you want to capture your readers in the story, put them in the story by saying "she, I, me". Talk in first person, not in third. You did kind of rush into things. It's a nice start, nice beginning.
ImNotTwistedImSpiral Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Not bad, but it kind of ran together. Try to slow a little and explain things more and assure you don't have as many typos. :D. Maybe you were in a hurry when you wrote this. :)

Overall, I love the plot. It is a nice start and I can't wait to read more, so I am going to get started on the second chapter right now. ^^
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