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When I Needed You [wip] by Carodemi When I Needed You [wip] by Carodemi
wip of song art of
this song:
youtu.be/bhMutZEBgdw

mcsealed dubiousmushroom  critque it please be harsh
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Shadow-Hedgi Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice job! You've got to teach me how you made it in that dark theme, it looks so real~!Monkey D. Luffy (Thumbs Up) [V1] Monkey D. Luffy (Smile) [V2] 
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Carodemi Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Haha thanks ;u; im personally still learning haha
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Shadow-Hedgi Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
No problemo amigo :3
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dubiousmushroom Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
*cracks knuckles* let's go
very first thing i noticed is that it's dark as fuck. not a bad thing, and my screen is usually really dark, but i can't actually make out any of the guy's features. i went into PS to turn up the brightness, and saw two very easy ways to add some much needed contrast- the tip of the lit cigarette, and the lights from outside the window. you did try, but i hadn't even noticed there were lights outside until i messed around in PS. you get points for the bokeh effect though, you were clearly going for a cinematic feel and the out of focus lights help tie it in nicely
regarding lighting and texture, this guy is covered in fur for the most part so there's not gonna be much variation, but obviously, eyes are smooth and wet. this means you can add a specular, which would help distinguish where the hell the rest of his face is, and adds some visual clarity.
i'm not gonna comment too much on stylization and anatomy but you did the pink triangle inside of the ear thing again. we've had this conversation before man, ears are more complicated than that and they're rarely hairless. the shape and amount of fur on ears are a big part of identifying what species an animal (or furry) may be, so don't neglect it. going by ears alone, i would of assumed this guy is a cat (idk, maybe he is? the muzzle makes me think of a dog or wolf). composition wise, it's. ok? it does it's job and there's no glaring flaws. also niva's advice about the smoke was good, good job niva i love u
a picture is worth a thousand words etc. etc. i did a very quick paintover to help illustrate what i was saying (sans anatomy issues)
screenshotcomparison.com/compa…
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Carodemi Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
ok thank u!! I'm gonna try and fix it tomorrow and fix all those things or I might just redraw it completely. Also,with the broken lights, how did you do that effect? Bc I couldn't really figure out how to do it properly and I am working on anatomy + style. My goal for the end of the year is (I'd like to be able too)
Paint a decent full body 3/4 with okayish antatomy.
So I need a better understanding of lighting and shadow so I'll focus on that, posing and anatomy
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dubiousmushroom Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
cool cool, if you need anymore help don't be afraid to ask
PS has a lens blur effect which is how i did the lights. i'm not sure if any of the programs you use have it, closest thing may be gaussian blur but that works very differently
i think it's cool that you want to paint a 3/4 thing but i haven't even seen you draw one yet mate. i mean i wish you luck but you're not running out of time or whatever, there's no rush to be "EXTREMELY GOOD AT ART RIGHT NOW IMMEDIATELY". baby steps, try learning how to draw a 3/4 shot traditionally, it's much easier to start learning that way.
betcha weren't expecting to be lectured TWICE HAHA
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Carodemi Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I have been doing 3/4 studies actually thank u and aight cool. A piece I'm working on now is a 3/4 headshot then I'm moving to half body then full body aha. And I know, I'm just kinda tired of my art looking rlly basic haha
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mcsealed Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2017  Student Digital Artist
i cant find anything to critique harshly cause everything about this piece is amazing whoopsies
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Carodemi Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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there must be something!! does anything look off ;o;
i did this rlly quickly 
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Carodemi Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
mk THANK U I shall fix that 
im also working on my side of thr art im lining it rn
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mcsealed Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2017  Student Digital Artist
yW
when ur smoking the smoke DOES go up, but its kind of scattered in all directions a bit
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Carodemi Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
thats true thats tru thank u lol i didn't think about that
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