Perhaps if you didn't make his bangs to long and spikey the hair could come out better; that way it wont cover the eyes and such. Unless, you want it that way then go for it Overwall, good job and I see you took the advice from the other picture and applied the colors and lines together Good work!
I haven't really been working on anything unfortunately :/ I have been studying in school and in my off time I have been catching up on some videogames.