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Daily Deviation
Daily Deviation
November 29, 2021
Featured by Barosus
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I can never let you inside, darling,
Not inside this mind of mine
Where shadowy facades and dazzling truths dwell

Or is it shadowy truths and dazzling facades?
I can no longer tell

How can I let you inside, darling,
When I can't even begin to tackle the enormity of my own thoughts?
The big, shaggy, lumbering beast
That is somehow never within my reach

I can feel myself floating sometimes,
A tiny insignificant leaf adrift upon a mirrorlike pond of fathomless depths

That vivid leaf which is my core, the very center of my being. . .
Is a different entity entirely from the dark glossy sea of my thoughts

Do you see my heart?
I am holding it out to you,
Grasped tightly in my shaky hand
For you to see
For all to see

The achingly slow descent of decay,
Breathing out the fire of infection,
Containing the barest whisper of a zest for life
What a sickening pulse
The beat is suspended, frozen haplessly in the threshold of time
I peer at the fibers of that cauterized flesh,
The frayed ends singing a dulcet awakening
I rejoice
The veins aren't shriveled
The organ beats a strong rhythm
Calling to you
Perhaps there is still hope for me.
Thoughts can be a hard thing to place. . . and a harder thing to face.
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BrightFlame-HellWolf's avatar

Thank you for all the wonderful comments and congratulations. 🥺 I appreciate every single one of them.

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marcelle4140's avatar

Thanks. I enjoyed reading this. It made me stop and think.......which is always good for me

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segura2112's avatar

This has an dark edge, but at the same time there's flicker of hope. Thank You and congrats on the DD.

Jirachi111's avatar

From one poet to another, this is amazing. Well done! :D

Jesse5344's avatar

OMG!!!!

that is so pretty😀

Brokenangelr's avatar

As odd as it may sound, this is beautiful! Thanks for sharing ^_^

LindArtz's avatar

Very Nicely done!!! :clap: Congrats on your DD!!! :)

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BrightFlame-HellWolf's avatar

Thank you so much! I didn’t realize I had earned a DD until I read your comment. 😳 I was shocked but happy.

LindArtz's avatar

They do send notices... so it's probably in your feed somewhere. The problems is, people don't always check their feed, so it often get buried, and goes un-noticed.

And that's exactly why I do go out of my way to congratulate people. So. You are very much welcome. :) :heart:

Barosus's avatar

I really like this one! It is starkly real and personal but yet hopeful in the end. Well said. ^_^

PrecariouslyPeculiar's avatar
Aww, I adore the sincerity of this piece. The lines...

How can I let you inside, darling, 
When I can't even begin to tackle the enormity of my own thoughts? "

Really caught my eye. There's so much power there. It made me stop and think about moments in my own life in which such a statement was applicable. Well done! :aww:
VincentVFF's avatar
Its where the best things hide. I really love the vulnerability in this piece, it really reached in and turned you inside out. Bloody Heart Bullet 

"That vivid leaf which is my core, the very center of my being. . .
Is a different entity entirely from the dark glossy sea of my thoughts" Beautiful 
BrightFlame-HellWolf's avatar
Thank you so much! <3 Feedback always means a lot to me. I'm glad I conveyed what I was feeling so well. :)
Thank you for the watch and the fave as well.
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