At last - my final critique is once more aimed at you, and I'll pretend I blame your abundance of fine poetry for this. Now then, let's begin.
First and foremost, let me open by saying that your usual brand of mixing poetry with an image is flawless in this one.
Both the ship on the left and the font you picked are perfectly in tune with the poem itself, not to mention the text's color. The latter manages to emerge from the background while simultaneously blending into it such that the artwork's spirit is preserved. Excellent balance.
As for the poem - I noticed it's free-verse, so I can't really ramble on its technical half.
However, its message is of a deep nature, and I daresay I'd be almost disappointed if your poems didn't always hide an existential side by now.
There's nothing for me to nitpick on, in here.
Both the message and the way you prettified it is perfect, not to mention that you don't resort to convoluted artifices that would obscure your poem's meaning, as I found to be common in free-verse poetry.
As always, keep up the nice work!
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After reading your critique, I am really glad that you picked this poem rather than my latest one. I just got done trying to rework an old rambling, rather directionless freeverse poem from my first days on here. I went back and read it a couple of days ago and cringed so hard. It fit your exact point about what is so often wrong with freeverse. Even the updated version is still too long, overly bombastic, and messy. However, I wanted to still keep the gist of the original rambling, disjointed mess and just try to refine it. So, it is what it is and I am breathing a sigh of relief you picked this one. I am happy to know you liked the cut of this one's jib.
Thanks so much for the kind words about the font and how the text is displayed. That was actually part of the composition that I agonized over. I tried several other ways to get the text to pop against the back ground, and they just weren't working. I was really loathe to create a text box and partially obscure some of the image, because doing so effectively camouflages the floating barrel and the anchor.
I really am only a rudimentary photomanipulation artist. Naturally, in the end, I had to opt to showcase the text since that is obviously the thrust of the work anyway. But, I am very happy you liked the aesthetics of the graphics more this time. In fact, this critique was so glowing that I am practically blushing. LOL
For being a rudimentary photomanipulation artist, you certainly don't lack sensitivity to details - and I'm honestly sure you could restructure that old piece into something that pleases you.
Still, even if it turns out your poem fights your good faith, then even leaving it in its original form makes sense.
Some writings are just what they are and refuse to change.
I am almost stunned by how strongly you protest whenever i try to be the least bit self-disparaging. I hardly know what to say. I get the distinct impression that if I ever said something really negative about myself, you would be the first person to jump up and argue that it isn't true. I hardly know what to say. But, you practically brought tears to my eyes, I felt so appreciated. Layla, you are the best! Okay, now I am crying happy tears. I am so sappy, but my gosh, you blessed the crap out my lil froggy heart!