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The fog besieges, a cloak upon my wary mind
A fraction of me notices the descent into sleep
The rest unceremoniously decides to ignore it
I float, a different self, into the room prepared
It is dressed with oddities that seem so familiar
There is a strange and listless peace for a space

The room begins to vibrate in visible waves
And I can feel the threat before it reaches me
It bleeds throughout the air and bids me hurry
My feet glide on frictionless panels into the air
I run and don't look back, yet the evil reaches me
I wake, unable to keep a grasp on the transience

This poem is for Writing Contest Prompt #4 hosted by Pat-The-Kitsune www.deviantart.com/pat-the-kit…

Dreams won 1st place in Pat-The-Kitsune's Writing Contest Prompt #4.

You can find Pat-The-Kitsune's journal here: www.deviantart.com/pat-the-kit…

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PrecariouslyPeculiar Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2018  New Deviant  Writer
Thank you for the llama, I might not have come across this otherwise :) I love the imagery here. At least, my interpretation of it, which might unfortunately not be the one intended. But it makes me think of those rough sketch sort of illustrations in children's fairy tale books. The kind that transcends the average. There is magic in this world, even if it is of the sinister variety.
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Asahi-Taichou Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2018
Thanks. 
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LilithxBlood27 Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2018
Heart 
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Asahi-Taichou Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2018
Thanks.
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RJBG Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2018
Great work!
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Asahi-Taichou Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2018
Thanks! 
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Pat-The-Kitsune Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2018  Hobbyist General Artist
Great imagery here! Definitely hits close to home with me. I love how at the beginning, you add that small bit of detail about actually falling asleep. To me, that's exactly how I perceive it when I feel myself nodding out of consciousness. I also really like the sudden speed you pick up towards the middle/end. The bit about your feet "gliding on frictionless panels into the air" is perfectly described. I can't tell you how many times I've had dreams that feel exactly like that. Trying to run from something but having nothing available to give me any traction. I've never actually been caught in any of my dreams, but I suppose that may constitute a dream turning into more of a nightmare at the end, which I definitely appreciate you adding to this bit of poetry. The transitions are smooth and almost perfectly render all the feelings one may experience when falling into a dreamlike state. Superb job! :clap:
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Asahi-Taichou Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2018
Thanks! 
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jonwassing Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
Very esoteric, I like the feeling of eccentricity and panic you invoke. Dreams can be so strange, can’t they? Nice work, good luck in the contest!
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Asahi-Taichou Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2018
Thanks! Maybe you can vote for me when the time comes? 
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jonwassing Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
Sure! When does the voting start? 
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Asahi-Taichou Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2018
Not sure. 
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jonwassing Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
OK, let me know when and I'll go vote for ya.
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Asahi-Taichou Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2018
Thanks. You can vote for it here: www.deviantart.com/pat-the-kit…
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jonwassing Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
Voted! :D good luck!
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Asahi-Taichou Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2018
Thanks! I really appreciate it! 
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BlackLacedMinx Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2018  Student Writer
This was really good! I like the creepy tone of it :)
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Asahi-Taichou Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2018
Thanks! 
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BlackLacedMinx Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2018  Student Writer
You're welcome!
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