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Shipwrecked

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Published: January 19, 2010
Substring sonority
Replicant diaphone call
pressed
through dead air
space

Between waves
and the hours unwound
in down
and cotton-mouth
swan-song:

Time is tied in knots
around ankles
cold
and caught
in the undertow.
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Updated: 19/01/2010 @ 07:38
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Another deliberately-fragmented piece, only this time without such obvious reference. Think fog, shipwrecks, space, insomnia, and death monologues. Additionally, a diaphone was regularly used to sound warnings: most commonly as a fog horn.

Not sure what to think of this one, however the nature of the project is to upload what I have. My major irk is the repetition of 'undertow' from my last piece; it appears to be my word of the week. It stays because I am indeed prone to recycling phrases; however, never before in less than 24 hours. Ahaha.

A likely candidate for future revision.
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CocoKingsolver's avatar
CocoKingsolver|Professional Photographer
'Time is tied in knots
around ankles
cold
and caught
in the undertow' This will stay with me for a while.
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arctoa|Student Photographer
Heh, this is one of the pieces that I am more content with, so I am glad you were able to take something of substance from the wreckage of words. Thank-you kindly.
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halcyonshores|Hobbyist General Artist
Beautifully haunting. :thumbsup:
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arctoa|Student Photographer
Many thanks. :]
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limnides's avatar
It kind-of feels like a surreal nightmare... or that feeling of utter panic/dread when something is about to happen that you know you can't control.
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arctoa|Student Photographer
The basis for it is something like a combination of the two, so it's good that this gets through the disassembly of syllables.
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