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it is midnight and the clocks are chiming in the almost-silence. the sky feels like rain and somewhere, some girl is dancing and laughing and smiling, but she's certainly not me.

our hearts are cold. they've been sleeping, curled into themselves for too long without a blanket or a pillow or a smile to fall back on. it's midnight and the sky feels like rain and there's going to be a storm later,
but it won't match the storms inside, that's for sure.

we are biting our nails, smiling and pretending nothing is wrong and saying, yes, darling, i'll get rid of this horrible habit in the morning. it'll all be better tomorrow,

except it's midnight and our hearts have gotten rotten and we're lying and it's never going to get better.

we are alone and we are balloons let go before they were ready, we are flying at the mercy of the winds. we are alone, we are alone and all we want is someone to go back to, someone who will keep us until we can fly on our own, someone who will love us and kiss us on the forehead and say it'll be alright,

but it's midnight and we're stuck in a storm and we're going to pop and no one's going to care, no one's going to pick up the pieces.

you were beautiful yesterday, you know. you were beautiful when you were outside in the sunshine and there was dirt on your hands and you were frowning. you were beautiful when you were asking the flowers outside to grow, grow please. because you're sick of everything under your care dying, you want something to make it, you want to feel like you did something right.

but darling, it's midnight and the clocks are chiming and no one cares,
and the flowers are going to have to learn to grow without sunshine.
here's to writing when you're half-asleep.
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Brici5 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2012  Student Writer
beautiful details and emotions emanating from this writing
I love it!
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kittykittyhunter Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2011   Writer
Hi. You’ve been featured here.
Please fave the article and check out the other pieces to spread the literature love. :D
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BloodxRain Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2010
you're **
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BloodxRain Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2010
<3 Your awesome~!
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A-Symmetry Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Here's to writing great work when you're half-asleep.
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wander-wonder Featured By Owner May 31, 2010
ITS AMAZING(:
i've always thought that writing when you're half asleep works really wellll (:
i actually read it ages ago, and ive really forgotten how beautiful it iss:D
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DesolatePages Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2010
Eh! I've favorite..ed? so much of your work. You're a real inspiration.
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Cak71497 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2010
this is so amazing
:heart:
i feel like someone actually understands me
:heartbreaker:
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ame-kami Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2010  Hobbyist
you're such an amazing writer, it's unbelievable :)
i really like this one :heart:
it's... just, wow :clap:
:+fav:
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MadameUlliel Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2009   Writer
Goodness, your prose is amazing.
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amigirl786 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2009
awwwwwwwwwww :(
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sadie90 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2009
I adore this, especially the last two lines. :love:
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Amertie Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2009
thanks. =]
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thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2009
you are...i don't even have the words. you are love in a bottle. if i could write like this when i'm fully awake, i'd die of instant happiness. :heart: :heart:
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2009
haha, your writing is already amazing. <3
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thefireflyliberation Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2009
my writing pales in comparison :heart:
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aikiro Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2009   Digital Artist
How gorgeous! <3
It all feels so sad when you reading it, its the way writing should be!
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Amertie Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2009
thanks. <3
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aikiro Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2009   Digital Artist
But of course!
:hug:
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TheAfterWhys Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
but darling, it's midnight and the clocks are chiming and no one cares,
and the flowers are going to have to learn to grow without sunshine.


:heart:
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2009
:heart: favorite line.
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freelancestyle Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2009
This is a very savvy piece.

"because you're sick of everything under your care dying, you want something to make it, you want to feel like you did something right.

but darling, it's midnight and the clocks are chiming and no one cares,
and the flowers are going to have to learn to grow without sunshine.
"

I have to say that's those are my favorite lines from this piece. Keep up with the writings. : D
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Amertie Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2009
thank you very much. =]
those are my favorite lines, too.
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loverz116 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2009
wow, this is amazing and beautiful.

you should write more when you're half asleep. XD

:heart:
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2009
you're really sweet, you know that?
:hug:
thank you.
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:iconloverz116:
loverz116 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2009
aw, thank you. that's actually sweet of you to say that.

you very very welcome. :heart:
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vicioustraditions Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2009
this is like a battered lullaby chiming for all of broken people. i feel like i've probably already commented it, but every now and then i get the urge to come and read it again and again and again. you're that wonderful.
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2009
awww, you're incredibly sweet.
thank you. :hug:
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myheartcage Featured By Owner May 30, 2009
Absolutely inspiring. The last two lines in particular are outstanding.
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Amertie Featured By Owner May 31, 2009
thank you.
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acciopen Featured By Owner May 25, 2009  Student Artist
oh i really like this :D half asleep, thats impressive.
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner May 29, 2009
thank you. :heart:
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acciopen Featured By Owner May 31, 2009  Student Artist
your welcome
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BlueSnowGiesha Featured By Owner May 24, 2009
wow,
it's absolutely gorgeous.
i love the .... how should i say it....
the way you said it all,
not just saying it straight forward.
whatever it is, i mean ;]

just-absolutely incredible.
definitely a fav deviation on dA :]


[haha, i cried ;~; a little bit]
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BlueSnowGiesha Featured By Owner May 24, 2009
wow,
it's absolutely gorgeous.
i love the .... how should i say it....
the way you said it all,
not just saying it straight forward.
whatever it is, i mean ;]

just-absolutely incredible.
definitely a fav deviation on dA :]


[haha, i cried ;~; a little bit]
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
thank you. :hug:
and i think i get what you mean.
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BlueSnowGiesha Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
no problem :]
good<3
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xTwoStepFour20x Featured By Owner May 23, 2009
This is beautiful.
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner May 23, 2009
thanks. :heart:
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pardonM3 Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
you were beautiful yesterday, you know. you were beautiful when you were outside in the sunshine and there was dirt on your hands and you were frowning. you were beautiful when you were asking the flowers outside to grow, grow please. because you're sick of everything under your care dying, you want something to make it, you want to feel like you did something right.

but darling, it's midnight and the clocks are chiming and no one cares,
and the flowers are going to have to learn to grow without sunshine.


:clap:
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner May 23, 2009
thanks. =]
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beyondweird Featured By Owner May 20, 2009
I love how you repeat the ideas of midnight and storms - but remember, rain and storms help things to grow :)
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner May 23, 2009
thanks.
and sometimes they just kill everything.
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RiparianVeins Featured By Owner May 19, 2009  Hobbyist
wonderful. it's bathed in an odd sanguine (in my mind). i love it.
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Amertie Featured By Owner May 23, 2009
thank you.
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underwolfskins Featured By Owner May 18, 2009
Ahhh, I cried. ^^;

'Tis beautiful, I luffle it. You can write better half-asleep than most people can write awake! :nod:

Write a book! Grawr. :XD:
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:iconamertie:
Amertie Featured By Owner May 18, 2009
:hug: i'm sorry.

haha, maybe someday.
i get bored of ideas, though.
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:iconunderwolfskins:
underwolfskins Featured By Owner May 19, 2009
Well I'll most certainly buy it if you do. =P

:hug:
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Pan-Zareta Featured By Owner May 17, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
Raises a foamy glass of beer..."Prosit!"

Maybe I should try that.
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Amertie Featured By Owner May 18, 2009
prosit?
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