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Together At The Top by AltairSky Together At The Top by AltairSky
Benisuzume needs more love.
I wanted to experiment with warm lighting here, and rocky mountains, because my mountains had always been lame so far.
I'm quite happy with the rocks, not as happy with the lighting but oh well. 

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page 420 - back home - Suzumega Medabot by AltairSky  page 337 - attempt - Suzumega Medabot by AltairSky  Loss 06 - Suzumega Medabot by AltairSky
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As I stare at this piece, I am thoroughly amazed by your skill. This piece is amazing, like I am quite in love with it. The main subjects of the piece are so well detailed, the lightning is beyond exceptional, and over all the piece within itself is very well brought together.

On the flip side however, there seems to be SOME lack in detail when it comes to the background, it looks like a bunch of color layers strung together, but even so, the piece is still amazing. One ACTUAL problem I would kindly point out is how the face of the human is slightly off centered, more specifically the eyes.

Other than that I have no issues with this piece. Please keep producing beautiful art like this, I can't wait to see what else you have in store for us in the future :)
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All i have to say is,wow. Just, wow. Every little thing about this picture is purely everything right about Deviantart and is kind of the reason why I even joined in the first place. The background is so realistic that it seems like that I could reach out and touch it. The anatomy is just absolutely superb, with the character looking realistic enough to be good, but not so realistic that it reaches to uncanny valley levels of creepiness. The lighting is where it should be, The clothing is drawn extremely well, and the robot is a perfect balance of cartoony and realistic. In short, 5/5 stars my man. Keep up the good work.
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ninebark Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love your shiny metal critters - they have so much personality! Excellent background and rock texture patterns too. Really nice and nifty all around.

I saw you mentioned you wanted some feedback on your human tho. I'm thinking skin could be an easy tweak to fix. I'm guessing you're using one hue and just going up and down in value, with a bit of bounce light to give it color? I'd totally try to push that all the way to 300%. Next round, play around with using more colors in the skin, real colors. Brown, red, yellow, pink, a dash of green, some purple, go wild - you can always scale it back after and smooth it out to taste. I did a couple redlines in Improvement-Club a while back which, while not actually standalone good, try to show this concept in action. See what you think:

Redline - Deep Inside by ninebark   Girl - Feedback by ninebark

Also, skin is super weird. 

Hope this helps!
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AltairSky Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
thank you for the advice! I'll try that!
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neurotype Featured By Owner Edited Dec 26, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
You mentioned issues drawing humans so that's what I'll focus on. I think I have a sense of what's going on here--you're not totally familiar with muscle and bone structures, so while you have a sense of what a person should look like on the outside, you're missing some of the underlying structure. You do a good job of creating the shoulder muscle shape, and the elbow by itself looks fine, but when I look at your character as a whole there's issues. For instance, given the musculature of the arm, I would expect the back to also be well-defined, but there's not much of a trapezius (which, yes, I totally Googled) and the torso overall is rather smooth, even though I'd expect the rib/oblique muscles to add definition to that shape. And then the top of your character's head, considering the bandana, is actually pretty large (imagine what the skull would look like), while the neck connection seems a bit sketchy.

So basically, I'd recommend doing some anatomical studies as well as - if you can get access - drawing from life (not photographs). If you aren't already, try starting off drawing your humanoid characters in the 'bubble' method (where they're a bunch of interconnected shapes) before adding in hair and clothing.

Aside from that, I will say that the warm lighting looks quite nice! It's clearly warm, but not unnatural.
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AltairSky Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
thank you very much for your critique! It helps a lot!
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Slave2Karma Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2017
Awesome! Love Altair's expression! 
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:iconaltairsky:
AltairSky Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
thanks!
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Eternal-Shadow-S Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
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Great picture! Love the design of the Medabot. I'm quite the fan of robots, knights and pretty much anything with metal, so I really dig the reflection and the design. It's good to see that people still have some love for Medabots. The background is also quite a good highlight of the overall picture. The lines are smoother compared to the main focus of the image, yet the style is still similar enough to know that they fit together. The colors of the entire image is also great, has a nice relaxing feel to it. The area of where the sun touches is also shown very well.

Now, there are a few things I do think that needs some fixing. First of all, your Medabot character. Since it's not human, I needed to look at some of your references, because I felt the eye looked a bit strange. So when I compared to your page 337, that visor should not be that visible. With the head faced up, more of the bottom of the face should be shown and much less of the eyes. Lastly, the character's head looks a bit too small, that or the face is too small, as the proportion of the face seems to be different from the rest of the body.

Overall, great picture. Colors and designs are really good. The only nitpicks are the face and head. Other than that, great work. Keep up the designs!
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AltairSky Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you very much!
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Strickplayer Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
Now this is cool, I was about to ask if had a comic, but I see the link. do these two have a bio of some kind? Cause each look very interesting. It has a very cyberpunk like feel to it. The shading is very good as well, same goes for lighting. The expression on Altair (who I'm guessing is the guy with the headband) is done very well to. I don't think know the robot names, but the sunlight coming off of him or her looks good too. I had to look at the image again to see he had wings btw, which is always a good touch. The background looks good, not to much effort on the far back to show how much distance their in. You did really well with Altair hair too, it has a very nice texture. But what I think I like the most is that you made sure, that all the focus was one these two, which is perfect. I hope to see more work like this in future, cause you just got another watcher my friend. 
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AltairSky Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you very much! 
you can find the bios here (though they're textwalls and it would be less boring to just read the comic)
The robot looks different but the "mind" is the same.
Altair Tarazawa reference sheet by AltairSky   Hummer: Suzumega Prototype reference 2015 by AltairSky
you can find all the other reference sheets here: altairsky.deviantart.com/galle…
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Strickplayer Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
So Altair is a girl huh? You know I had my suspension that she was. But the picture made it hard tell, this is my first time seeing the two.
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:iconaltairsky:
AltairSky Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yeah she's very neutral looking (it was my choice to make her that way, we already have enough moe girls around)
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Strickplayer Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
True dat! Real talk.
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AltairSky Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
yep  ^^
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Tinseii Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2017
I love the way the foreground and background make this picture seem alive; the shading is done beautifully and the shine on the metalic parts is really beautiful. Everything is finely detailed which can be difficult when painting something. Great job, I also love the expression on the robot.
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AltairSky Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
thank you very much!
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IfDeathhadaCat Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
The light on the Benisuzume armour looks unreal. :heart: Love the pose and overal setting, it looks so serene. :love:
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AltairSky Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
awww thanks! I had a lot of fun with the light!
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AltairSky Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
please don't advertise on my stuff. It's rude.
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EtherDraw Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
This looks wonderful! The lighting are spot-on here, I adore the brightness and how blended warm colour scheme is used here~ :iconjunesplz:
I adore how you draw the characters' poses and expression, it shows contrast and emphasise their own personalities.
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AltairSky Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
thank you very much! I really love these characters and they are very well developed (they're the protagonists of an 800 pages comic) so it's easy to find the right inspiration to draw them! 
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:iconetherdraw:
EtherDraw Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Your very welcome! And that's cool~ I'll need to read the comic to see their development. :icondojimathumbsupplz:
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AltairSky Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Aww thanks! I hope you'll like my story! The art is kind of ugly at the start but it'll improve with time, you know, the downs of taking years to finish a comic.
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EtherDraw Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Your welcome, and I understand with the difference between the old and new~ :iconjunesplz:
My art style was very different from how I draw now haha!
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SugarBirchMabel Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This piece is honestly spectacular, and I love how welldone this is. The colors go together nicely, and nothing really clashes in a noticeable way. The lighting is bright but soft, and it gives you a warm feeling that you would get from viewing a sunset or sitting close to a comfortable flame. The background is also very nice as it portrays a vast land of mountains and new potential adventures. : )

10/10
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AltairSky Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
aww thank you so much! I wanted to make an artwork with warm lights because I tend to always use blue light and I had a lot of fun on this one!
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SugarBirchMabel Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I really enjoy it!

You're welcome and have a great day/evening/night!
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ManchinesAndMonsters Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Bueutifu by ManchinesAndMonsters  
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JH-MoKuReN Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2017  Hobbyist
The level of awesomeness of this piece is over the mountains!La la la la 
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AltairSky Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
aww thanks!
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CarthagePlate Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2017
Impressive! Glad you could collaborate with someone on this. A part of me wonders how they got on the mountaintop to begin with. Was it a challenge between each other, a friendly climb, or something else entirely?
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AltairSky Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I didn't collaborate with anyone on this, it's 100% mine :)
Well they do everything together so if they want to go hiking, they'll do it together. You don't really need a reason to climb a mountain, you do it for fun!
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KimaAndJeorge Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This looks amazing! So well done!
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AltairSky Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
thank you very much!
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Badrater Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2017
The shading.......... It looks like it was done by a GOD!
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:iconaltairsky:
AltairSky Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
awww but it could be better!
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Badrater Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2017
I think it looks awesome just the way it is
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AltairSky Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
aww thanks!
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Badrater Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2017
No prob
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Alpha-Pain Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
X3
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AltairSky Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
^_^
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PredalienMaster Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
ohhhh so cool!! i like it, specially yout tocks (backgrounds are my second enemy DOES. IT. WORK. OR. NOT?  )
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AltairSky Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
aww thanks!
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Songal Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2017
I think it shows off your style more than trying to create real rocks and lighting, in fact it looks better this way in my opinion ^^
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:iconaltairsky:
AltairSky Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks! But I'd really like if I could draw realism.
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Songal Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2017
I understand, it still looks amazing 
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AltairSky Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
thanks!
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Songal Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2017
welcome ^^
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