the lines from the face, to frame the difference from the 'color stripe' to the face... they just don't seem right. They kind of seem like you threw them in at the end. I think I would have much prefered them in white instead of the grey. Mabye they are just the pencil lines? I do see that you are pushing the boundaries of your 'usual style', and I really do like the piece overall, but since you requested this critique, I thought I would just put my 2 cents in the comments. Love your work.