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Succubus - 01

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Succubus :heart:

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:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star: Technique
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Impact

The thing that instantly jumps out to me is the warm skin color and color tones. (They're like mine <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt=":)" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="391" title=":) (Smile)"/> It's refreshing to see them once in awhile.)

So taste in women aside, it is stunning and gorgeous, but her pose seems awkward. It seems like the point of the art is the sheer elegance, beauty, and deadly allure of the succubus, but it lacks that "feeling alive" because it looks like she's posing -it's an awkward pose that doesn't really say anything other than "Hey, I'm fanservice in an awkward pose to show more skin!" (I assume she's original, but you should see what I'm getting at here.)

What strikes me as odd is the knife and the wings. So it looks like blood splatter from the knife? That's part of what contributes to the awkwardness, her arm isn't in a convincing position to imply she's ripping it out of someone. Raise her arm and bend it a little with the knife tilted on its Z axis (so the blade tip is partially pointed at you) to show the force behind it. It'll really display the savagery and reveal a little more skin without going overboard on either. Obviously, the blood trail would have to be lifted as well. Then only the legs would look a little awkward. You could drop the blood trail altogether and make it look like she's about to stab someone, in which case, her leg placement would kind of work, but no matter how I imagine it, it'll look awkward the way it is.

As far as my bias is concerned, I love all the color tones. The red really pops, the skin tone is warm and enticing, the black silky dress looks like shadow and water which is both ghastly and elegant. The hair is sexy and the eyes are fantastic. Considering this is a speed painting, it's absolutely incredible and a style all its own. One of my gripes though, would be the wing size. They're tiny. They make me think of a cartoon shoulder demon or a fairy more than a succubus. Consider making them bigger. If you wrapped the right wing around her right side a bit it'd be clear what the black mass coming out of her back is if you worried it wouldn't be clear.

It just lacks life. This would be incredible if it had it. It wants to come to life bad. You can see it in her eyes. Everything else just fails to follow.

So, vision, 3.5. I think you had something slightly more awesome in mind, but it didn't turn out the way you wanted.

Originality, 4.5, because all the other succubi on the web are either pale as a ghost, white, in leather, in belts, naked, classless, drawn in bad anime style, in overly gruesome or sexualized art, or depicted like a hideous monster/demon/devil; it's usually a combination of those. Haven't seen one as nice as this at all. So great job on that. The .5 remaining doesn't mean I would change this though. Originality can be overrated if the product is good enough. (As if .5 matters, but still.) This doesn't need any more originality. The concept is perfect the way it is.

Technique, 5 out of 5 because all styles are subjective. I feel comfortable giving it 5 out of 5 because I friggin' love your style.

Impact gets a 3 because of the wonderful color and her eyes, head, and hair. Otherwise, the lack of feeling, of motion, of action that should be captured just before it takes place is absent. There's no moment to capture and no life in it which makes me :sadface: because it's such a beautiful piece.

All in all, I'd give it a 3.75. It wants to be a 4, but just doesn't quite get there. If you brought it to life and added some darker shades in the background with some reds you might be pushing a 4.5-5 with this, but I'm imagining a completely different pose now.

Your work is beyond incredible. I look forward to seeing your future pieces.