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Skeptics Crown

Harsh critique welcomed! Please zoom.

I'm a snail now. 

- Woman: Tris-Marie
- Ice: Broken GlassLarge Quartz Crystal Stock
and some that belong to me. 

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:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star: Impact

I think the color and light adjustments you made are simply awesome. They make the silver glitter of the original stock pop and turn the model into something mysterious and alien. Also the "stars", textures and particles fit very well as they add some depth to the portrait.

The bright blob on her shoulder is bothering me a little. It was sort of unaffected by the light adjustments and it now stands out like a sore thumb distracting from the main focal point (I would manually fix it by painting over it on a layer with the mode set to darken - I guess you know how to do it <img src="…" width="15" height="15" alt=":D" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="366" title=":D (Big Grin)"/>).

The crouching pose, the dark colors, flying particles, and a mysterious crown covering her eyes - overall you've followed the rule of cool very well. It would be absolutely perfect and awesome if the crown were fitting her a little bit better in terms of lighting.

I suppose it's really difficult to work with glass or ice structures (that's why I avoided it so far), but you can see for example around the nose area that the lighting is not consistent. The nose has very strong light reflections and contrast whereas as soon as the ice starts the light becomes dull- I would have the impression that it should be the opposite case: the glass/eyes should reflect the light harshly, or at the very least as much as the nose.
The bright icicles on the left of the crown also stand out a lot and distract from the focal.

The extra eyes in the crown are a very nice and creepy detail btw.

Finally, the blending of the smoke cloud with the icicles is a bit sloppy. I think a clear transition between those elements would work better, with some ice in front and some behind the smoke. Right now the two elements seem to be gradually merging.
Also here the lighting seems to be inconsistent: The ice is lit at the top, while the smoke has highlights at the bottom. To fit the overall scene better, I guess the light source of the smoke picture should be at the exact opposite direction.
I principle I would say the picture would do well without the smoke, too, although I'm aware that it probably has to be there because of the concept.

Hope these few points help & good luck getting over your art block. <img src="…" width="15" height="15" alt=":-)" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="392" title=":-) (Smile)"/>
AbbeyMarie's avatar
Soooo I waited to long to accept this (I didn't know that was a thing) but I have obviously read it! 

Really appreciate the feedback Erik, it's gold!

I placed this one in the "needs revisions" pile pretty much instantly so I will for sure be putting your advice into action. 

Thanks again! 
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no problem, I also often need forever to respond to something and besides, you wouldn't be the first one. :XD:
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I love this piece! Heart  Since you want critique Sweating a little...  I thought I'd tell you what I think would look cool. I think it would balance the piece well if it transitioned into a scales on her skin down I think it would keep the attention on her face and still balance it out and not make it quite so top heavy.  Just my personal opinion. I love your work. x :happybounce: 
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Thank you so much for the critique! And sorry for the late response! :love:
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Wonderful work and idea! :love:
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Your very welcome! :)
VeilaKs's avatar
So amazing work! Really impressive!
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Thank you for the kind words! 
Irina-E's avatar
Interesting, unusual and impressive Rose 
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The trifecta! 
Thanks you!
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The lighting looks fantastic! However, I think there needs to be a smoother transition from one texture to the next - I'd like to see the skin transform into the smooth clear material of the crystal, but right now it looks more like it's a matter of shifting opacities.
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Thanks for the feedback! Will be reworking the skin to ice effect when I get time for revisions!
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That is beautiful, my friend!!
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Thanks so much!
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