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Western Watch, Chapter 3, First Draft - Bitch SlapAuthor's commentary:
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Unlike Chapter Two, Chapter Three does have a clear point-of-view (POV) character -- Merreth. The chapter is really composed of two scenes. The first is where Merreth and Sarrit are in the hallway and on the staircase landing. The second is where Merreth meets Lady Tiandraa in the crowded administration room [I know I need a better name for that room]. Like the last chapter, both scenes lack a clear scene goal for Merreth, though a couple of goals are implied (finding quarters, getting past the Red Hand without being noticed). Both scenes will require re-writing. In addition, Hanahk, the friendly tribal chief will be gone in the re-write. His brief appearance in this chapter was to be the beginning of a sub-plot, but it never went anywhere in the subsequent chapters, so he'll be gone in the re-write.
The essence of the chapter will remain though -- Merreth's confrontation with Tiandraa, where Merreth's temper gets the better of h