Critique for Critique 2.Second round. Last time people seemed to enjoy critiqe exchange, so I offer it again.More Like This
* for NON- premium members too! (it´ll be comment for comment for you)
* want more feedback on your work?
* some constructive advices how to improve?
here is deal: write critique on one of my deviations that you like and I´ll write one on your deviation (you can also leave me link telling which deviation you want criticized)
* just comment here saying which of my works you´ve criticized
* you can also fav this, so more people will see it, but you don´t have to
note: please be patient, it may take few days
EDIT: of course, you can give me more critiques, I´ll return every one of them
EDIT2: use any language you want *sigh*
A letter to my CongressmanCongressman Neugebauer, you said on the Chad Hasty show (790 KFYO) prior to Thanksgiving that you were thankful for the men and women in our military for protecting our freedoms and our liberties.More Like This
I'd like to know specifically what freedoms and liberties those are. Because here at home we have the TSA harassing innocent citizens and violating the 4th Amendment on a daily basis, the DHS is currently operating "fusion centers" across the country that routinely spy on citizens without warrants and a Congress that has attempted to allow the indefinite detention of American citizens even after they've been tried and found not guilty, until Congress declares an end to the on going and open-ended war on terror*. These are but just a few examples.
In my opinion, Congress, over the last decade has been more of a threat to the freedoms and liberties of the American citizen than the terrorist our military are currently fighting.
The men and women in our military have made the greatest of sacrific
Phoenix(English version below)More Like This
Instantané de fuite.
Un courant d'air passe par-là.
Regards furtifs et coeur qui bat,
La peur d'oublier pourquoi.
Evadés du système,
Pauvre peuple du bas.
Cours, cours, ne te retourne pas,
Le dégoût des hauteurs te prend comme un vertige...
Résiste encore, encore un peu,
Le passage est étroit mais ta main est ferme.
Accroche-toi à l'espoir du beau,
Au rire des futurs,
A l'idéal insoumis.
Tout est mortel.
Mais ne t'y fie pas.
Les cycles recommencent et sont différents.
Trouve la brèche et le courage.
Allume un feu d'esprit qui servira de phare
Aux égarés de l'océan putride.
Flambe ta vie.
Tu es Phoenix.
Et moi aussi.
Snapshot of flight.
A current of air through there.
Furtive glances and heart beat,
The fear of forgetting why.
Escapees of system,
Poor people at the bottom.
Run, run, do not look back,
Disgust heights takes you like vertigo ...
Dark and LightTo be valuable light needs darkMore Like This
To show its potential, to cast a spark.
And in the other hand, dark needs light
To show the importance of your helpless sight.
And if light needs dark
And dark needs light
Could you ever tell, which side is right?