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First picture in foreverOH MY GOD!!! I JUST DREW THE HARDEST THING I'D EVER DRAWN EVER!! A VERY SEXY FEMALE PICTURE OF CIEL.... HOWEVER, I'M USING IT AS A PICTURE FOR ROSALIE!!! HOLY CRAP I'LL UPLOAD IT ONCE I FINISH!! GOD THAT WAS REALLY FREAKING HAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRDDDD!!!!!!!!!! http://4.bp.blogspot.com/_qSSgHM0MZPA/TNgEHCgZPcI/AAAAAAAAAB4/c7b_RXf5FT8/s1600/1274686107_1024x768_ciel-phantomhive-pic.jpgFirst picture in forever in Personal More Like This
Well Under constructionWell he had a point there's a lot of wrong things wrong with my story:Well Under construction in Personal More Like This
This fan fiction is a good start, and I'm glad to see that so many people enjoy it already. But I see a lot of ways that you could go about improving it, and so I have a little bit of critique! The main problems I see in the story are with the portrayal of Rosalie, the conflicts with Kuroshitsuji canon, characterization of (in particular) Ciel and Alois, and some distractions in the writing.
On Rosalie, I only see four big problems. First off, the naming is inconsistent; you should know what names your character goes by. I understand that she prefers "Rose", and that Ciel occasionally calls her "Rosie", but her full name is given as both "Rosalie" and "Rosalinda" on different occasions.
Secondly, why is Rosalie conflicted about breaking her own engagement when Ciel so easily broke his for her? It is not at all obvious what she sees in Alois, especially since noble/royal duty doesn't matter to her, according to how s
Discovered the most amazing song ever!Hush, child, darkness will rise from the deep,Discovered the most amazing song ever! in Personal More Like This
and carry it out into sleep, child.
Darkness will rise from the deep,
and carry it out into sleep.
My only son,
I'll shape your belief,
and you'll always know
that your father's a thief.
And you won't understand
the cause of your grief,
but you'll always follow
the voices.
Loyalty... Loyalty... Loyalty...
My only son,
your spirit will
hate her.
The flower who married
my brother the traitor.
And you will expose
his paltaple behavior,
for you are the proof
of how he betrayed
her loyalty.
Loyalty... Loyalty ... Loyalty...
Hush, child, darkness will rise from the deep,
and carry it out into sleep, child.
Darkness will rise from the deep,
and carry it out into sleep.
My only son,
each day you grow older,
each moment I'm watching
my vengeance unfold.
The child of my vibe,
the flesh of my soul,
will die in returning
the birthright he stole.
Loyalty... Loyalty... Loyalty...
Hush, child, darkness will rise from the deep,
and carry it out into sleep
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Nana'sSitting at home with Nana and Grampy and Sissy, So i finally finished chapter six. I hope you guys Like it I'll put it up on Sunday after Bowling and What not! So I guess that's really all! Well Adieu mon amis!!!Nana's in Personal More Like This
(I'm doing a play En francais! so i have to memorize my lines! :iconaloisleleleplz
slight delay... end of the weekend!slight delay... end of the weekend! in Personal More Like ThisI'm almost done chapter V.... so you guys remember that promo teaser right? Well I'm thinking that might take place in chapter X or XI maybe even XII I'm not sure, since it's Alois' Birthday Chapter V and well they have the same birthday month!
So I'm contemplating who killed Rose's Parents (was) But I had help from ~MyChemicalDana she's pretty awesome! I already Know who Rose is going to choose... and well It might not be what your expecting only a few people know ~VegetasGirl99 and I think I told ~MyChemicalDana but I'm not sure...
I'm going to change the cover and the info I might have written down somewhere! Well I'm sorry about the Delay but I got some really good ideas for chapter VI and I think your going to like it! Well if someone actually reads this post I'll be happy!!
MY PAGE WILL BE UNDER CONSTRUCTION FOR THE NEXT LITTLE BIT I'LL BE FINISHED TOMORROW HOPEFULLY IT JUST LOOKS PRETTY SLOPPY SO IT NEEDS RE
HELP ME PLEASESo can you help I need good school Colors for Shiori's School outfit... Someone anyone help meHELP ME PLEASE in Personal More Like This
The Mysterious Shiori TsukamotoShiori Tsukamoto is a normal seeming 14 year old who enjoys spending time with her Kendo Coach/Boyfriend Kyouya she loves her friends but she doesn't know her birth family she was adopted into a very loving family she never really knew much about her past life as a child she only remembers the day her grandfather found her in the streets near his house. she was given a pendant by her boyfriend Kyouya on her 14th birthday it unleashed her inner-self; what is her inner self, what is her inner-self you ask, well keep reading and find out!The Mysterious Shiori Tsukamoto in Personal More Like This
Main info about Shiori:
Shiori has long black hair that goes down to her butt. She has olive green eyes and Porcelain skin. She loves cats (big cats like tigers and such) Shiori is a bit lost but takes out her frustration out on her partners in Kendo and Judo. She's an international Kendo Superstar because of her training everyday after school with her Boyfriend Kyouya Fujiyoko. Shiori is always practicing for competitions in Kendo and Judo She's
Devious Journal EntryOswn and I sat in traffic I sat there looking at the ring I was looking so forward to giving him. But he wouldn't want to wear it if he already had his ring, she was so happy when she was bored; it was strange to see a demon that happy. She always seemed so carefree, and happy, I certainly envied her, I want to be happy again, but I had so much happen in the past year it was the thirteenth, today was his birthday, I was so excited to give him that ring. It was beautiful; I found it in an ark I had bought. I never would have expected the ark to be a fake. I sighed and look at my demon companion.Devious Journal Entry in Personal More Like This
"Oswn, you always seem so carefree and happy all the time," I sighed.
"Oh I'm so sorry milady," she dropped the bells she was ringing.
"No, no, no, I'm not criticizing I just really envy that in you," I said.
"I'm so glad my lady, I'm glad you envy me, but if you tried, maybe you could be happy as well, you never know do you, I mean, you seem to be happy when you're with Lord Phantomhive. But th
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