The Problem with Self InsertsThe Problem with Self InsertsThe Problem with Self Inserts in Reviews & Guides More Like This
There is nothing wrong with inserting yourself into a story. Like anything, it can be well done or... not so well done. The fact is, the majority of people who tend to write about self inserts happen to be beginners. Naturally, that causes there to be a pattern of certain, specific mistakes that are frequently found whilst reading anything on the internet. The purpose of this deviation isn't to say that self inserts are bad. I'm simply going to point out the most common mistakes that we usually encounter.
1. Making ourselves better than we really are.
Don't be fooled by the word "better." This can be replaced with mysterious, deep, dark, tragic, romantic, lovable... anything we want. Maybe a mix of a few of those things. The point is, the version of ourselves will be biased.
2. Not making anything bad happen to yourself
Let's talk about the word "bad." Does this mean something, perhaps, like... getting a disease? No. It means anything that interferes with
An extension of How not to Write Love Interests“Faith, in the sense in which I am here using the word, is the art of holding on to things your reason has once accepted, in spite of your changing moods.” - C.S LewisAn extension of How not to Write Love Interests in Reviews & Guides More Like This
This quote is about faith not love, but you can see how the same logic applies. If faith is not merely to "feel" as if you believe something, why should love be merely to "feel" that you like something?
In the end, faith is remembering you have reason to believe, and love is a choice about how you treat someone. Feelings are irrelevant. They are passing. They are constantly changing, and that's natural. They can indeed play a role in our decisions about relationships, but are a fickle factor to base an entire decision off of. It's like building a house on the sand. We're human beings with intelligence, and there is no such thing as a feeling so powerful we HAVE to act on it-that is fantasy.
What about circumstances? What about age? Can it ever be simply a waste of time?
On my last deviation, people arg
The Problems With Stories Written by TeenagersDon't be offended at the title. "Teenagers" is just my way of saying "people who write unprofessional/shallow stories." Not all teenagers write shallow stories, it just sounds catchier.... Anyway.The Problems With Stories Written by Teenagers in Reviews & Guides More Like This
The first thing I want to make clear is: I'm not talking about anything mechanical in this deviation. Grammar/spelling is important (obviously), but that point has been beaten to death by people on the internet already. My purpose, as always, is to talk about the stories themselves, regardless of the way they are communicated. Whether it be through written word or on-the-spot narration, I believe there are certain tricks to telling good stories. Not rules, mind you. Tricks.
I don't believe that telling good stories is about what you "should" do, rather than what you shouldn't. Example: people generally hate Mary Sues, right? Well, sometimes I notice things that are "like" Mary Sues, in the sense that they're equally as shallow/unprofessional ways of telling stories. The purpose of this deviat
How Not to Tell a StoryAfter being on DeviantArt for a few years now, I've noticed patterns in people's stories. Patterns, that I can't say I've ever seen until I started using the internet. I believe that's because these kind of patterns are thoroughly unprofessional. The pattern in short is this:How Not to Tell a Story in Reviews & Guides More Like This
Character = victim
Plot = bad things happening to said victim
Maybe this sounds harsh. It's not if you understand that is ALL there is to these stories. They take any character, hurl them into a tragedy and that's it.
Let's get this straight: We do not know your character well enough to care about them yet. No matter how bloody and gutty their injuries are, no matter how many of their family members are deceased, no matter what their boyfriend did to them, no matter what kind of disease they have, WE. DO. NOT. CARE!!!!!
These kind of things are sad in themselves, but WHO is this person we're supposed to feel so horrible for? Establish THAT. It should be your absolute FIRST priority: no exceptions.
No more pasting
Blue Revolution: Professor OrwellBut who would be that person to step up to the challenge. The answer lays in a classroom in New York University the man, Professor of History John Orwell.Blue Revolution: Professor Orwell in Short Stories More Like This
Born John Fredrick Orwell on April 7th 1892. He was born into a family of farmers in upstate New York, he stayed until he was 20 when he decided to travel to Syracuse to attend university in hopes of becoming a professor. But 5 years into university he was drafted into the Army and was sent to the western front to fight with the French and English. During a battle he was shot in the shoulder and was sent to an infirmary, there he met a French solider who gave him a book, the solider said nothing and walked away. Orwell was confused but he looked at the book and took a slight interest in it. Orwell could speak and read French and say what the title was “Manifeste du parti communiste,” otherwise known as “The Manifesto of the Communist Party.” He had heard of communism before but never took the time to learn of
Blue Revolution: Death of the Republic.*Turns on TV * Good evening and welcome to the evening news I’m your anchor Tom Mainly. Today June 19th 2015 we celebrate the 75 anniversary of the victory of the Continental Liberation Army over the Right wing totalitarian government that had exploited this nation for 7 years from 1933 to 1940. It may have Been a short rule but during that short time the nation changed more than any other time in our history. And now for the special event, we bring you the few remaining survivors of CLA and along with existing footage to tell the story of these modern day sons of liberty and their struggle for freedom. All that and much more now on the American Broadcast Channel, until then Happy Liberation Day."Blue Revolution: Death of the Republic. in Short Stories More Like This
History is written by the victor, 75 years ago one nation changed the course of history forever. The Us which had gone through a bloody Civil War had emerged from the death and carnage to become the most powerful nation once more, but what had happened the to us for that Civil war to oc
Blue Revolution: Revolution and Rebirth.After a long train ride across the US, professor Orwell and his brigade of students reached the Rocky Mountains. From there they took a truck to take their final journey into the mountains.Blue Revolution: Revolution and Rebirth. in Short Stories More Like This
Anchor Mainly: To give us a more in depth look at this event we have Jacob Sinclair one of the few remaining of Orwell’s Original Brigade. Mr. Sinclair can you tell us what it was like when you first saw the camp?
Mr. Sinclair: Well it very much was that, was a camp. There were hundreds of tents scattered around with fire pits and crates of weapons surrounding it. There was one structure and it was an old park ranger outpost. When I saw this is was thinking, “did I do the right thing?” But once I saw that there were a few thousand men training I felt more reassured.
Anchor Mainly: Did you have any combat training beforehand?
Mr. Sinclair: The most intense battle I had ever been in to that point was arguing with my girlfriend on what dress she should wear *Laughter * In all seriousn
Requiem: Death LettersRequiem: Death Letters in Introductions & Chapters More Like This
Leeds is the first awake. Shadows of his dreams still echo in his eyes when he paces into the kitchen and startles her.
"You're too quiet." She smiles.
He doesn't. "Did you sleep?"
"I couldn't," she says.
He just nods. She pours him coffee. He drowns it in milk and sugar. They welcome the morning in companionable silence.
"I wanted to be there for him." It's a whisper. He stares at the coffee mug in his hands, seeing something very different. "I saw him get hit. I wanted to be there so bad. I would have gone in, but Vance held me back. Probably saved my life.
"Zack." He stops, almost overwhelmed, then forces himself to go on. "I would do anything for him. I would die for him. But I couldn't be there." His eyes are rimmed with tears.
She lays her hand over his.
Leeds wipes his face.
Fortitude And Faith“Nileas!” Ausrius bellowed again. He could find no trace of his fellow, even with his enhanced senses, and helmet overlay. No trace of the daemon either.Fortitude And Faith in Introductions & Chapters More Like This
He surveyed the cavern again, slowly re-examining all the corners. He checked the load in his bolter, and advanced, weapon at the ready, continuing to scan in visible light, infrared, and wireframe overlay. The ripples and folds of the tunnel played tricks on the mind, casting odd shadows and concealing entire caverns behind seemingly solid formations of stone.
“Nileas,” he voxed again. “Brother, do you copy?” Likewise the dense rock played havoc with the vox net. He had no contact with his squad commander, or Imperial forces on the surface, and, up until a quarter-hour ago, only intermittent contact with his battle brother, and that plagued by static. Now it seemed that too was gone.
Small Problems Ch.1 (USUK)Arthur dropped the final ingredient into the simmering clear potion. The lock of blond hair fell from his palm and disappeared with a soft plop.Small Problems Ch.1 (USUK) in Introductions & Chapters More Like This
"Finally, America, you'll see." he muttered to himself as he heaved the pot off of the flame and set it down on the cool stone floor of his basement. He then went upstairs and grabbed the old-looking phone off of its hook. He dialed, and waited for someone to pick up.
Alfred whipped out his phone, quickly throwing it in between his shoulder and ear, as he started to madly press on the buttons of his Xbox.
"Y'eeeeeeeello?" he replied, as an explosion sounded loudly in the background.
"Alfred, at least greet someone properly over the phone if you cannot do it in person!" Arthur snapped.
"What!? Dude, i said 'hi,' what else 'ya want?!" Another explosion sounded, and some gunshots as Alfred cursed loudly.
Pinching his nose, Arthur took a deep breath. "Would you like to come over for a drink?" he asked as calmly as he could.
The game immediately
Window to Another WorldThere was no logical explanation for the window. There was no magic in the world that would allow such a thing to exist.Window to Another World in Short Stories More Like This
And yet it did.
Alice had found it the moment she stepped into her room. It was a bit hard to miss, being the only large round window in the house. It appeared to be a normal window, if now a bit odd for the shape, until the fifteen year old girl looked through it.
The view from that particular window didn't show the forested backyard like all the other windows on that side of the house. Instead, it showed a view from out of a fairy tale. There was a Cinderella-esque village with an elegant pale castle rising on the edge of the horizon.
The first time Alice had seen it, she had stayed frozen in shock for a few moments, convinced it was all an illusion. But no, the people down in the street continued on with their lives, as the most likely did all other days of their year.
It became a regular hobby of hers, watching them. It gave her a chance to escape her own nightma
Sci-Fi vs Fantasy. A battle of the idea's!Fantasy - magic and/or supernatural creatures and/or a made-up worldSci-Fi vs Fantasy. A battle of the idea's! in Philosophical More Like This
Science fiction - advanced technology, space, science. (usually set in the future)
Now let me tell you I love both of these, and I will EXPLAIN (I need to stop doing this) why.
Like I said about Fantasy and Sci-Fi in previous deviations, I find both franchises to have potential still locked within them.
The world of science fiction and fantasy is rich and varied. Often lumped together under the catchall term "speculative fiction," these two distinct genres encompass a number of sub-genres. Many who don't read sf/f are unaware that the two though close kin are very different. This is what happens when you have half a brain in science and smash it together with what is supposedly physically possible to the human mind. Sci-Fi righters pride themselves with the ability to apply science to there stories, so that they can be explained with math and physics. Of course there have been cases were someone doesn't explain anythi
People are stupid...Humans are naturally extremely hostile, monstrous beings. And I say that not on personal bias... but on the back of science.People are stupid... in Philosophical More Like This
So before you bible huggers cry "Blood for the blood god!" let me explain that it is through this hostility that we grow, because until we grasp the fact that we will never grasp true perfection is the day we finally take another step foreword.
You may or may not have noticed this, but humans are a rapidly growing element of earth's ecosystem. Since humanity's hardscrabble beginnings many thousands of years ago, all the way to the sophisticated complexity of today's sprawling mass of Other People, the human population on earth has been growing. Not consistently, not steadily, but relentlessly nonetheless. As species go, we are currently jaw-droppingly successful. In other words, there are more and more of us all the fucking time.
Stupidity has not hurt us one bit. We were stupid a long time ago, we are still stupid, and yet we continue to reproduce enormously suc
The Eye of the World by Robert Jordan: A reviewTolkien is renowned for his work on the world of The Lord of the Rings and I never thought he had a rival. When Jorden was penned by the New York Times (at least according to the blurb I read) ‘to dominate the world that Tolkien began to reveal’ I was sceptical. Still, I read on.The Eye of the World by Robert Jordan: A review in Reviews & Guides More Like This
The Eye of the World is the first out fourteen books (fourteen!) by Robert Johnson (the last three also partly written by Brandon Sanderson, which gave me a positive sign here!) in the Wheel of Time series. Set in a large fictional land, where ages rise and fall, legends pass into myth then forgotten about only for ages to return again, it follows (for the most part) Rand al’Thor, a normal sheepherder in Emmond’s Field who lives a simple life with his father Tam. However, the arrival of four guests for a festival to their town, including a lady and her protector, seems to start a series of events. Trollocs invade and attack the town, revealing the lady to be Aes Sedai Moraine, one who c
Steelheart by Brandon Sanderson: A reviewI’ve been meaning to read another Sanderson story in a while and now’s my chance with a new series. I’m still not sure if superheroes come under fantasy, sci-fi or a class of their own, but my local libraries seem to think it’s a fantasy. So, better dive in.Steelheart by Brandon Sanderson: A review in Reviews & Guides More Like This
Unlike mst superhero type tales, Steelheart doesn’t have any heroes with powers, but anti-heroes. When David, the protagonist, is 8, an event called Calamity happened. People began gaining amazing powers, only to then become arrogant and power hungry. One of the most prominent is Steelheart, an Epic (as they are called) who has powers that remind me a little of Superman and invincibility. Yet, a day at a bank sees David’s father shoot Steelheart (accidentally, he was actually trying to stop another Epic from killing him) and, for the first and only time, Steelheart bleeds from a scar on his face. This results in the death of David’s father and many others, David being the only survivor of t
Guide - realistic dictatorI've noticed a trend of having dictator/world-ruler/people in a position of power characters. Normally, I find these types of characters fascinating - I love hearing the minutiae of how they keep their regime in control, the cults of personality they develop, their rise and their fall ... it's one of the reasons I love 1984 so much; is Big Brother real? Did he even exist in the first place? Who is the real leader of Oceania? Unfortunately, I've begun to see it addressed shoddily and without much thought, so I decided to make a guide of sorts (more like a glorified checklist) for anyone who is curious on how to develop their dictatorial character, and to make them realistic.Guide - realistic dictator in Reviews & Guides More Like This
1. Why do they want power?
I have seen this written away with, "because they want to control everyone", which is true to an extent with many historical figures who were dictators, and also fictional characters. However, this often goes much deeper than "wanting to control everyone" or "they're mad, I tell you! MAD!"
The Great Battle of the Kronstadting sea(PLEASE NOTE THAT THIS IS A PARODY AND IS NOT SUPPOSE TO BE TAKEN SERIOUSLY I REPEAT THIS IS A PARODY THAT IS NOT SUPPOSE TO BE TAKEN SERIOUSLY SO PLEASE ENJOY)The Great Battle of the Kronstadting sea in Short Stories More Like This
Date: April 1, 2420
Location: Kronstadting sea
It was a calm day at sea, Dolphins were jumping around while the local population of Fin whales were in the middle of thier mating season while at the same time a great white shark with a god damn laser gun strap to his head for some reason ate its fifth human victim cause reasons.
All was perfectly fine, that was until Two fleets enter the area, one fleet being compose of a Iowa-Class Battleship (ASWS RV), a Kirov-class heavy missile cruiser (ASWS SCH), Four Bismarck-class Battleships (ASWS CONQ, ASWS SPUNZ ASWS GERMANIA,ASWS ROMMEL), five Ticonderoga-class cruiser mark 41 (ASWS DELTA, ASWS CODY, ASWS MEP, ASWS SWORDSGIRL, ASWS CHIM), two Nimitz-Class Aircraft Carriers ( ASWS DA, ASWS SHIRU) and a Virginia-Class Submarine (ASWS SOUL)
The other fleet was
Mercenary 1-1MERCENARYMercenary 1-1 in Introductions & Chapters More Like This
Chapter 1: Blood is Beauty
Release One: Pages 1 - 3
THE COLD AIR in Baron Rorke's study did little to calm his nerves. He was expecting visitors this night and they were not the best of company. A shiver of dread ran down his spine and he spent most of the twilight hours staring out of a large window which stood behind his writing desk. It was amazing, he felt, how quickly a man could become attached to a life of luxury; only to be made painfully aware of how easy it was to lose it. War was always a frightening thing, even more so when one had the knowledge and sense to realise that it was no longer an exercise of glory, but a simple festival of bloodshed and cold murder. In war it did not matter if you impaled a stranger on the edge of your sword, such a thing would be punishable in any city or country, but in times of war it became an accepted norm. If the man in front of you wore a different colour, then it was alright to kill him, it was alright to rip him apart fo
Utau Text TutorialUtau Tutorial 7/14/2009Utau Text Tutorial in General Non-Fiction More Like This
Welcome to Krissy's Utau tutorial! By the time it get finished, the English version might be out. So read while you can!
1) The first thing you do is download Utau, you can do this here http://utau2008.xrea.jp/index.html.
Click the very first link under 'Download' and install it. Don't worry, there are no spyware or viruses.
2) Once you loaded it and checked out the program, you'l