TF: Old Soldier FIRST DRAFT Contest EntryTitle: Transformers: Old Soldier FIRST DRAFT Contest Entry
Universe: G1 (Pre-Earth)
Warnings: Violence, Non-canon character death
Author's Note: This is my (mostly) unedited first draft. The contest specified minimal editing, which was extremely difficult for me. While I don't think this is bad, it's not as refined as I'd normally post. In fact, there are two details which need work/editing. Hopefully, they're not as obvious to others as they are to me (since I'm super critical of my own work).
Smoke hung heavy over Praxus, obscuring optics and clogging vents. Here, the once proud city-state stood cracked and charred, covered in ash. The glorious crystals of the Helix Gardens, the pinnacle of Cybertronian art and beauty, lay shattered. Many of the civilians were gone, long since fled or dead. Those that remained had abandoned their civilian ways, forced into more militaristic roles.
Raising above the surrounding ruins, th
Tips for Writing Good Fan FictionTips for Writing Good Fan FictionTips for Writing Good Fan Fiction1 year ago in Writing More Like This
Hello! I’m Indy, or Indiana if you prefer the long version, and this is somewhat of a tutorial on what I look for, and find, in good fanfiction. I’ve been writing fanfic my whole life, and I’ve dabbled in many fandoms, most notably of which have been Sonic the Hedgehog and Portal. I’ll offer some insight as to how I write, as well as things I notice inexperienced writers tend to do. Before I start, I’d like to make a disclaimer that I am of course not an expert. Hopefully this is helpful to someone.
Understand Your Characters
This is a very important thing to do if you really want to do a good job. You can write a story without understanding them, of course, but the more deeply you know the character, the deeper the story is going to be. You want the story to be deep. You want the reader to lose themselves in the story, and if something jumps
Literary Merit for Fanfiction WritersSo last winter, something amazing happened to me. Well, a lot of amazing things happened to me. I met iammemyself here on dA, and read her stories. They inspired me to start writing again, and I wrote one in particular for her birthday that was really, really good. So good, in fact, that it was selected for a Daily Deviation. Now, at the time, a fanfiction group I didn't know about had a policy of adding fanfiction DDs to their featured folder. They added my piece, and I, intruiged by their premise, joined up. I started doing LiteraryFanFiction's weekly challenges, their Flash Fan Fiction Fridays, writing some of my best work for these weekly exercises. And in the fall, I was invited to pitch in as an administrator. I'm still learning the ropes for approving and denying work there, but my grammar nazi tendencies are not all I have to contribute. I love writing about writing, and I felt like doing that today.Literary Merit for Fanfiction Writers1 year ago in Writing More Like This
I find a lot of confusion about what literary fanfiction is. I
Guide to Writing SummariesThis is to all of my fanfiction.net peeps, and to anyone who wants to learn how to write a quick, less-than-five sentences summary of their fanfiction or story.Guide to Writing Summaries9 months ago in Writing More Like This
1. For the love of all that is good fanfiction/writing, stop writing summaries like this:
A story about a boy and a girl that meet on vacation...Sry I suck at summaries. Plz read. It's good I promise. I am so much better at writing stories than writing summaries. Before you even try to give me an excuse, let me give you a fact. 99.99999999% of readers DO NOT EVEN BOTHER TO READ YOUR STORY BECAUSE OF THAT. I can't tell you how many times I have seen that on FFN and I just keep on scrolling past every story with one of those. You may not intend it, but this is the message you are sending to potential readers:
"I am not going to even try writing a summary because I am not confident at all in my writing abilities. I am a novice please give me a chance please please please!"
...No. Just no.
How to get comments - For WritersRecently, a member of the group I help admin, Authors-Club, brought to our attention that since joining,How to get comments - For Writers5 months ago in Writing More Like This
they really haven't been getting any feedback on their work, and were wondering how to get remedy this.
After giving it some thought, here's a quick "How to get comments" tutorial, pertaining to you authors out there.
Get comments on your writing!!
Many visual artists will tell you that finding that niche of followers who consistently comment on your work is hard. You either have to be in a fandom, and post up lots of fan art, have a kick ass style, or promote yourself till your fingers bleed. Writers, on the other hand, don't have that visual one up. Someone can't just look at the words on your page and go, THIS is the author I've been looking for! They have to take time out of their day to really read your work, and if you've got more than one ch
Writer's Tip: Writing Effective SentencesSentences—if the plot is the backbone of a story, then sentences are the muscles and tendons keeping it glued together. Unfortunately, writing solid sentences isn’t easy for everyone. As Human beings, we don’t speak the same way we write. Unless you do a lot of writing, you may have trouble putting together even the simplest of sentences. The last time you took a good look at a sentence and broke it down into its individual parts was probably around 3rd grade. Don’t worry—I’m here to help.Writer's Tip: Writing Effective Sentences1 year ago in Writing More Like This
There’s More Than One Type of Sentence
There are (roughly) four different types of sentences, and we’re going to get into each of the different types (with examples!).
Simple Sentences – This is a sentence in its truest form. A simple sentence is the statement of a single idea in a direct, clear way. Most simple sentences contain less than 20 words, but it is best if you keep your word count aver
Reading as a WriterHave you ever set down a book for good because you found something in it you don’t like? If you want to write, I suggest that bad habit end now.Reading as a Writer2 years ago in Writing More Like This
Why, you ask? Because everything you read—and I mean everything–has positive value for you as a writer. Stephen King, and any author worth his or her salt, is a huge advocate of writers reading massive amounts.
Again you ask, why? How can everything be useful? There are a number of reasons and I’ll cover as many as I can.
Reading bad literature teaches you about yourself and shows you what to avoid—or at least how not to do something—in your own work. If you run across something that you don’t like, stop and ask yourself why you don’t like it. Is it just a personal preference? Was it out of place or poorly executed? Does it contradict something from earlier? As soon as you figure out the “why” of something’s badness, you learn a little about yourself and you
DeviantART: A Critical Community (Part 1)You may have heard...DeviantART: A Critical Community (Part 1)1 year ago in Other More Like This
From the most novice to the most accomplished, dA is home to artists of all types and skills. This mish-mash of talent, experience, knowledge, and eagerness to learn creates a beautiful opportunity for mentorships between those who are learning and those who are willing to lend their time and patience to a burgeoning new artist or writer. But forming those relationships can be daunting for those looking for help and unfulfilling for those offering that help.
This is the first of a two part article series that aims to address a few key points of miscommunication that seem to be common between those willing to offer critique and constructive commentary and those seeking feedback. You may have heard that the critique community on deviantART "sucks" or "doesn't exist", but I'll humbly beg to disagree. I've been an activ
NaNoWriMo Resources Write or DieNaNoWriMo Resources4 years ago in Writing More Like This
There are tons of activities for National Novel Writing Month but the most important is that pesky writing thing. To help with that you can use an online application like Write or Die to do some solo speed writing. You set the time and/or word count you'd like to reach and then select your consequence settings. During the time you must continually type or you will receive a negative consequence.
Write or Die really does put the prod in productivity with multiple consequence settings and a timer.
Track your progress! This will help you see how far you've come and how much you still need to accomplish. It's a great way to procrastinate too! There are loads of fancy and simple ones on the internet if you run a quick Google search.
I found this one on deviantART: NaNoWriMo 20
How to Write Fight Scenes One of the biggest and most frequently asked questions that I get is this: “How do I write fight scenes as good as you do?” I actually got one of those yesterday, but to be fair, he changed it up a bit and asked, “How do I keep from being repetitive in my fight scenes?” As I typed out my long-ass answer for him, it occurred to me that this was the perfect topic for my next writing tutorial. So, thank you, random dude on FanFiction.net, for the sudden spark of inspiration.How to Write Fight Scenes5 months ago in Writing More Like This
So, fight scenes:
So much win!
As with nearly every other writing skill an author has in his/her repertoire, writing fights is a skill that takes a lot of practice. Sorry, kids, I know you wanted some gloriously simple answer, but there is none. I can’t just sprinkle magic Street Fighter dust on your head and make you a good writer of fight scenes. If you want to ge
Punctuating DialoguePunctuating Dialogue2 years ago in Writing More Like This
For non-native English speakers and young readers: If you hover over a blue word, you'll see its definition.
Punctuating dialogue can be surprisingly difficult, even for people whose first language is English. It's one of the things that you see all the time in books, but you pay little attention to, and all your English teachers assume that you already know it. Sure, if you read a lot, you pick up the basics, but even then it can be difficult to unconsciously absorb all the rules. (Until 2012, I was making heinous mistakes with commas vs. periods. I'm still weeding out errors from my novel.)
Anyhow, for the sake of my fellow spirits who bemoan the lack of proper dialogue education, I've researched the subject and compiled this little guide. I hope that it answers your questions, and that it isn't too dull.
Note: I use American English. Other English-speaking countries may have slightly different rules.
The 10 Worst Story OpeningsThe 10 Worst Story Openings2 years ago in Writing More Like This
*disclaimer* I did not come up with all this all by my lonesome, it kind of evolved from things I read by other people when researching how I should start something I was writing, and I noticed a lot of people were saying pretty much the same things. I know I’m cynical and I know there are bountiful exceptions to these so-called “rules.” These are just things to avoid or be careful about.
1. Waking up.
“BEEEP BEEP RIIIING RIIING, the alarm clock jerks 14 year old Jessica Parker out of a sound sleep. She groans and fumbles to shut it off. Her mom calls from the next room, ‘Hurry up Jessie you’re going to be late!’ Jessie wills herself to get up, and get ready for school. She looks into the mirror at her frizzy red hair, which always turns into a rat’s nest after sleeping. As she begins to brush out her tangled locks, her annoying little brother comes running into the roo
Writing BEGINNINGS for Short StoriesWriting BEGINNINGS for Short Stories2 years ago in Writing More Like This
I was wondering if you had any tips on starting a short story? Like for instance, I have the scene all laid out in my head, I know exactly what's going on and stuff, I just don't know how to begin without giving away too much info and then boring the reader. If that make any sense.
Tips on how to make a beginning...?
-- Why, yes I do!
The fastest way to start a story -- is NOT at the beginning.
Open the story within one page of Hero Meets Villain, (or Lover Meets Beloved) with the story already in progress. Action scenes and snappy dialogue are the best hooks for snaring your reader, but hints of Mysterious things yet to happen works well too. I also set the stage for the story about to begin with a few lines of Description so that the reader can SEE everything as it happens.
Here are some examples from my fan-fiction:
Opening to HERO (Naruto)
It was supposed to be a
Rant About: Write What You KnowFor if you write bullshit, bullshit will be written about you. I am completely and genuinely, without any reservations, in favor of what this marvel of writing advice tries to communicate to the budding author.Rant About: Write What You Know2 years ago in Writing More Like This
THE READER: A CURIOUS SPECIMEN
the reader. by MothArt
As a group of people wasting their time on your story because you chose a profession that hinges on owing people entertainment in exchange for money, your readers are about as ferocious in their criticism as hungry cannibals come. They do not forgive, and they start not forgiving with the very first line. However, readers are human, too. So while many of them possess the ability to walk away from having just finished a book they'd love to round up every copy of so they can throw it into an active vulcano for the good of humanity, others will feel that you have failed and betrayed them on a personal level.
You know this, because you are one of th
Show It, Don't Tell ItOne of the many things that make me hit the back button, put down the short story, or return the book to the library is "telling". The minute the author decides to state that "X was angry" or "Y was bored", I get angry or I get bored. I've seen this issue for years--heck, I used to have this issue myself--in both fanfiction and original fiction alike, and while many reviewers/commenters often call out the author on it, they never really explain the concept. Thus, the poor beleaguered newbie gets hate over something he/she may not fully grasp.Show It, Don't Tell It1 year ago in Writing More Like This
After years of seeing this unfold, I've decided to make a writing resource about it for :iconWriters-and-Editors:, in hopes that maybe, just maybe, it'll help somebody, somewhere.
What is "Telling"?
"Telling" occurs when a writer either:
a.) states a character's emotions;
b.) summarizes the setting; or
c.) summarizes situations that can be inferred or would have more impa
A Guide to Writing DialogueWhat is dialogue, exactly? The definition from Merriam-Webster’s dictionary was several lines long, so I shall summarize it in a short sentence for the sake of the readers; it’s the writing that illustrates conversations between two or more characters in a story. We read and hear it all around us, but creating it in your own work can be a challenge. However, if you find dialogue an obstacle in your writing, then don’t push the panic button. In this tutorial, you’ll find by analyzing what dialogue can do and how to use it, you can turn your greatest fear into your greatest ally in your story.A Guide to Writing Dialogue11 months ago in Writing More Like This
What dialogue is
Like I’ve asserted before, dialogue is basically what the characters are saying to each other. It can be found in multiple mediums such as books, movies, comics, video games, etc. We even engage in dialogue daily without even thinking. When you talk to your best friend, a co-worker, or even your dog, you create dialogue. It’s exchang
How to Develop Story ConflictHow to Develop Story Conflict7 months ago in Writing More Like This
Conflict is the central element of any story. It’s what keeps us on the edge of our seats and turning page after page until 3:00am. Or, as Wikipedia puts it, narrative conflict is “an inherent incompatibility between the objectives of two or more characters or forces. Conflict creates tension and interest in a story by adding doubt as to the outcome.”
So how do you create this all-important conflict in your stories? Well, it all starts in the development process. There are three basic steps to developing conflict, and they follow a specific logical progression because, ultimately, developing a good story is an exercise in logic. So let’s jump right in.
Step 1) Scope
The first step is drawing the boundaries your story’s scope. That might seem like a weird place to start, but scope will determine nearly every other aspect of your story.
The key here is to determine what within the world of your story is out of balance.
Rant About: Always Use Perfect GrammarHow dare you? How dare you write that to my face? To anyone's face? But I am no square. I'll give you the chance to explain. Explain to me:Rant About: Always Use Perfect Grammar1 year ago in Writing More Like This
Why? Why use correct grammar?
Come on, lay it on me.
I won't punch you.
All righty. So, the thing is, kind of every writing guide on deviantART tells me to watch my grammar like she's going to slip out the window and elope with her crackhead boyfriend to then die horribly in a car crash, presumably because being high on drugs while driving a high-speed vehicle isn't the recipe for live long and prosper.
I Have One Plural For You: Patterns.
routine by MustafaDedeogLu
People love order. People love things that make sense. And while people also love to now and then take a break from their daily routines to go ecotourism in Thailand, they love habit. Order, sense, habit, they make us feel secure. Just how much we depend on them is shown in our approach t
A Guide to (Useful) Character Reference SheetsThis guide won't give you a character sheet to fill out, but will walk you through the key features of character reference sheets (CRS), why pre-designed ones are useless, and give you tips on creating one that will be far more useful than any pre-existing questionnaires. Let’s get started.A Guide to (Useful) Character Reference Sheets2 years ago in Writing More Like This
§1. What’s the point of a CRS?
A character reference sheet, as the name indicates, is the reference document containing salient information that makes up your character. It is merely a tool. It is not for publication and your readers don’t need to see it. It exists to give you, the writer, a fixed point of reference. The information on a CRS is a package of traits your character brings with them into every chapter, and the point of having it written down is to give you 1) a firmly established understanding of your character and how they should act in every given situation; 2) something to come back to in case you’re uncertain of how to write a cha
Essentials of a Short StoryEssentials of a Short Story5 years ago in Writing More Like This
Essentials of a Short Story
Quotes raped from a critique of Nathanial Hawthorn's Twice Told Tales by
Edgar Allen Poe - 1837
Edgar Allen Poe, celebrated as one of the finest short fiction writers of all time, was also a literary critic. These are bits of his wisdom on writing short stories, gleaned from one of his critiques.
"The true critic will but demand that that the (story's) design intended be accomplished, to the fullest extent, by the means most advantageously applicable " -- Poe
Poe's Prerequisites -- in a Nutshell:
To deliver fullest satisfaction, a short story should be structured:
1) To be read in one sitting.
2) Using a deliberate number of characters and incidents.
3) With words restrained in style and tone.
4) All done that should be done, with nothing done which should not be.
Poe's Prerequisites -- in DETAIL
A short story should be structured:
1) To be rea
STUCK on a Short Story?STUCK on a Short Story?5 years ago in Writing More Like This
10 Second Tip:
Stuck on a SHORT Story?
Stuck on what to put in your story?
-- This is the list of things I check off when I create a story:
Do you have a Setting in mind?
- Modern day
Do you have ONE big main event for the story to focus on?
- A battle
- An escape
- A love scene
- An act of revenge
- A sacrifice
- A treasure to claim
- A magic spell
- A transformation
Do you know what you want to SAY with your story?
- Love sucks.
- Friendship is forever.
- No good deed goes unpunished.
- A snake can only ever be a snake.
- Sometimes you have to take chances.
- Magic makes things worse, not better.
Do you know where you want to END your story?
- A wedding?
- A funeral?
- A bloody battlefield?
- An empty street?
- The bottom of an ocean?
Do you have your three central characters ready?
-- Just to make things interesting, any one of t
Unstick your Plot - A guideThe Random Encounter The Guide to Moving Your Story ForwardUnstick your Plot - A guide5 years ago in Writing More Like This
The classical random (there's always a classic.): This is the sort you see in just about any old RPG, or RPG comic, and probably most current ones as well that person or thing you randomly meet so you can be sent off in a random direction and never have to meet them again.
Yeah, it works well enough for games I suppose but I don't recommend it in a story get around it wherever possible. One thing I saw in the Wheel of Time books (by Robert Jordan) was having the rumors and such be heard OFFSCREEN, and delivered to the characters by someone they know. You still get your information, but without the useless extra faces.
The only real reason to put in someone random is for some bit of symbolism, as a general rule, so unless you wanna get real deep or are prepared for your readers wondering if the old farmer is actually a reference to an ancient Norse God you might wanna avoid the classics.
Writing Emotions VISUALLYWriting Emotions VISUALLY5 years ago in Writing More Like This
Writing Emotions VISUALLY
"What is ...VISUAL writing?"
-- Visual writing is when the reader can SEE your story unfolding in their imaginations just like a movie.
* Non-visual: It was a dreary day.
* Visual: Icy rain slithered down the window glass from an iron gray sky.
This is more commonly known as SHOWING vs. TELLING.
* Telling: It was a dreary day.
* Showing: Icy rain slithered down the window glass from an iron gray sky.
"What's wrong with just...Telling them?"
-- The problem lays with Reader interpretation. Abstract (poetic) words and ideas rely on the readers' interpretation of what those words mean to them personally.
She was woefully depressed.
* How does Big Bird act when he's woefully depressed?
* How do Y
dA Writers-Get NoticedIt's hard being a writer on dA. For every one writer, there are at least 15 artists, 10 of which are fan-artists. And why would people turn away from fanart, comics, and/or yaoi to read your poetry/prose? You have to give them a reason.dA Writers-Get Noticed4 years ago in Writing More Like This
This tutorial will take you through a few steps which will hopefully bring your writing more attention, If you'd care to read:
I cannot stress how crucial this step is. Once you have your 1st draft done, revise for typos and grammatical errors. On the second time, read it out loud to revise for flow. Then check again for grammar and spelling. Read it again, revise word by word.
Can you create more impact with the same amount/less words? If you can, do it.
Now, here are a few things you should keep in mind as you revise.
In most lit thumbs, the first 110 or s
Writer's Tip: All About POVPoint of View. It can change everything. In the most literal sense, POV is the decision of who is narrating your novel, and what they see. POV also refers to the individual viewpoint of your characters, and ultimately, your readers. So where do you start? Well, that’s why I’ve written this article. We will explore the three standard POV options available to every writer, their advantages, disadvantages, and how to choose which one is best for you. Let’s get started.Writer's Tip: All About POV1 year ago in Writing More Like This
First Person POV
I stepped into the room on hesitant feet. Leander, the great Lion King of the river valley lay half-in-shadow at the back corner of the room, his tawny paws illuminated by a shaft of light filtering in through the high windows. His sable tail thumped once, twice, in the haze of dust motes, and my breath caught in my chest. I shouldn’t be here.
First person POV is denoted by the use of “I”, “My”, “Me”, “Mine