Tuesday feedback hourUPDATE: Tuesday Feedback Hour for this week is over, but you can still link your traditional artworks to get comments/critiques next week, also, don't forget to check out the features in the bottom of this journalTuesday feedback hour3 years ago in Deviant Events More Like This
We now have an official Tuesday Feedback hour stamp made by Zedna7, it's really awesome! Also, I welcome on board curlandgrazes, who volunteered to help me give you feedback & critique some of your work as well. Also thanks to DeaconStrucktor, who provided interesting links we all might use:
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WorthWhen you finally lie in all this darkness,Worth2 years ago in Short Stories More Like This
you realize the light.
It’s that flask within his hand.
He’s just like you,
eyes blank and gone.
That stare of his,
it just pierces right through.
“Are you the same?
Do you want a drink too?”
He gives you the flask and smiles.
“Where is your light?”
Flask, oh heavenly flask,
it’s in your hand,
it’s worth more than your soul.
Drink, drown, desire.
That makes us two.
Let us go down that path of stupidity.
Let us drown this can empty.
Let us desire every drop of high and darkness,
and scream out to the world.
I don’t know you,
and I’ll forget you,
but this night will always be there.
TrustTrustTrust5 years ago in Open More Like This
Trust is not something to be given away lightly.
You give it to a select few.
You give it to those who are closest to you.
You don't trust a stranger you see walking down the street.
You don't trust many of your friends who you meet.
Yet, you trust me
You trust me and talk to me...
Yet you've never met me
You don't know me
You may NEVER meet me
Yet you trust me
You trust me enough to tell me your troubles
You trust me enough to tell me your problems
You trust me with so much
But you do not know me
Yet you still trust me
You still talk to me
Like you've met me and have known me all your life
Like we've been best friends most our life
You trust me entirely and you don't know why
You question it, and so do I
We don't know why
We don't know how
This all started simply somehow
You trust me more than your closest friends
You trust me enough to give me a chance
Why Don't You Love Me?Why don't you love me?Why Don't You Love Me?4 years ago in Free Verse More Like This
I thought you did but you don't.
I'm your own son your own flesh and blood,
and yet you hate me.
I came into this world through you,
but I can't live.
Why don't you love me?
As elders you're supposed to teach me.
Why didn't you?!?
Instead you treated me like a child.
NO! you would treat a child better, an animal.
NO! worse you treated me like a stray thought.
As a thought you treated me.
Don't you love me?
Instead of teaching me you protected me.
The world I now can't live in because of you?
My life is worthless now I can't survive I don't know how.
Don't you love me?
No you can't you didn't do your job.
Your job is to teach me to survive in this world.
You protected me like a stray thought,
you put me in a perfect world that didn't exist.
But what happens when I firgure out too late that it's a lie?
You say you love me but you don't,
so just don't.
You love me?
How can you?
You lied to me about the world.
You said life coul