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you’ve buttered me up

slathered on your sweet honey

hot, ready to eat

every nook and cranny filled

What would you like for breakfast?

Trying a double-entendre tanka.  Started from a comment I made on And, I by seriousmess
(Just to clarify, the last line comes AFTER the first four...Get it? ;) )
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Love Haiku 3
For Puabi

Quiet time at home
Embracing tightly as though one
Inseparable lovers through time
My newest haiku for dear Puabi.
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Whether good or bad
Ruination of our hearts
Or growth of our souls
Love, it happened as it must
It just had to be that one

My heart is broken
How perfect, true and precise
Not just anyone
Could have done just this to me
Precious, deep and sundering

Not a gorgeous face
Nor ideal manifested
Could mimic what's in my heart
Only the moon could slay mine
With the slice of shining beams
Even if my heart is broken, it feeds me and gives me poetry to write.  There must be poems about pain, there will always be little heartaches, and how perfect that it happened just the way it did.  There will never be anything quite like it.  Thank you love, thank you pain, for giving me life.
There's just no use in being bitter anymore... He IS the Moon!!!
This is my form: en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Tanka_%2… It's called a Tanka, it gives me a little more freedom, or room for specification than Haiku.  I like the abruptness of Haiku, but this needed a little more.  I was coming up with more seven lines than five lines, and someone on DeviantArt(O GLORIOUS DeviantArt) recently introduced me to Tanka and that had to be it.
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I like the way the
bitterness of my coffee
makes your mouth sweeter.
 
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