DanceI very faintly remember, the first day I saw him.
Blond hair, blue eyes, and very, very slim.
I remember all his kindness, it put me in a trance.
I couldn't help but wonder...If he likes to dance.
We met each other, back in world war two.
He was so delicate, I didn't think that he would do.
I knew how war was, harsh, cruel & grim.
Everyday I feared, he may just break a limb.
But he was honorable, kind & good.
When it came to doing the right thing, he did what he should.
Soon he showed us his loyalty, and became our finest man.
He always stood by us, when everyone else ran.
We came to know each other, and our love began to show.
I thought that he might love me, but I didn't know.
But I knew the feeling was mutual, when he asked for a chance.
I knew my assumption of love was true, when he asked me to dance.
They were only little nods, only little words.
but the signs that we sent never went unheard.
My heart raced, and fought with desire.
My passion for him, was hotter than fire.
AgingThor looked to the sky.
Midgard was beautiful this time of year, but it was nothing compared to home...
There were few clouds covering the sun, in a gorgeous, pink fashion.
Still, nothing compared to the realm of the gods.
Coming to know humans, Thor found them so much like himself.
He didn't understand why he deserved more.
He was just a strong version of them all.
Why was he stronger?
Perhaps, some people couldn't be trusted with strength.
They couldn't all be like the Man of Iron, though.
Much like people on Asgard, everyone was an individual.
And, as the Man of Iron had proved, they were smart enough to find strengths.
They had worked their bodies, worked their minds and even made protective suits.
Thor couldn't understand why they were undeserving of being gods.
Though, he was sure there was some good reason.
Perhaps, at one time, they were more like the frost giants.
Who could assume anything at this point.
He did know that there was no point in making friends.
Daydream Romance. ( If I could paint. )If I could paint, I would paint him...
His deep, blue eyes, his sleek hips, his dazzling smile & sweet, tender lips.
Which way would I draw his hair? So many styles, to choose just one is not fair.
His cute little tummy, hands & his feet, his legs covered by a bright, white sheet.
I would sketch him out, the way that puts me in a trance, my little daydream romance.
If I could paint, I would do it for him...
For the way that he makes me feel, the closest I have come to something real.
For his dreamy voice that makes me lose sight, of all fears I had that night.
For the protection that his thought offers me, I should owe him something.
He would never give me a secant glance, but he's my dear daydream romance.
If I could paint, I would immortalize him...
The way he is immortal in my fantasies, as I toss & turn begging for him to touch me.
The way he is immortal in my reassuring dreams, more real than what it seems.
The way he is immortal on the big screen, while I just ad
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