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All Deviations
All Deviations


I sit on the side of my bed near the nightstand, where the glass of water rests me. My head now bows down; an inhaling and exhaling sigh comes about, as the wind through the window blows; this dusky omening shadowy night, the curtains withering and rippling. I take a sip of water from the glass I delve, reflecting heartfelt phantasm, and then shut lids over eyes to sleep. In a sudden lucid-vision on a trip I take, I could resonantly hear the Pianist on the Piano play her battle of friction on the keys. The Pianists' background changes to a desolate dark desert place, a place I had never been; mesmerized to the notes as I tread nearer. The sandstorm gets strong; the sky turns black with silent sniffle-gasping breaths reflected through the irises of her eyes, to this sleeping mind in rem. From this woman afar, the sky pours wounded rain. As the sand beneath my two feet is windswept off the ground, there is a door which lays ahead of me, no structure to help support it; just a door. I near to observe it. I look from one side, then the other. It does not seem it led to anywhere . . .  I go moreover to observe its secret. The door had no lock, nor a keyhole, but an emblem. The emblem resembled an angel with one wing, the other torn apart, and her feathers lying on the ground; this had to be eons old. Her touch it appears was all that could open it. Knowing this, as the storm grew harsh, I asked her to come hither to open this sturdy stoned door.
            A voice of echo came from abaft the door: "be careful, be wise, or you might meet your demise on this night you may never wake up." Left frantic I was, but I had already made my decision; no turning back now. After what could be true, but cold words, she went through me from behind, with her arm straightened out and palm pointed to the emblem; so onward she went to enchant the door for me. When her palm made contact with the door, the emblem burned beautiful blue flames around the woman it portrayed. The angels’ torn wing came together again, and the feathers on the floor within the detail of the emblem, rose to give feathers to her broken wing whence torn apart. The spirit-like woman vanished before me after opening the stone heavy door. Left soundless I was as to what I saw her perform. Before I proceeded to walk through the stone door, my eyes curiously peak through. I could hear bolts of thunderclaps and acerbic cold winds pushing against my face, which turns pale blue. This place contained more than just darkness. There were many broken keys on the ground; mine was one of them. My first name engraved on it, but only the three tarnished beginning letters remained from my last name on this key in abbreviation: K.O.E. My thoughts left in wonder, I knew not what this meant, but I knew there was more to this message. After retrieving the key, I tucked it in my pocket. Then, onward I tread along the ground of broken keys. The sound of each footstep I took made a metallic sound; one key rubbing up against the other, echoing throughout this vast place. I looked behind, as though it read my mind. The light through the crack of the door to the outside was nearing enclosure from the light. A flashback came to mind, my head now screeching to remember. Who is this place exactly? A thought came to mind, the mysterious woman was not too fond of light. I look up, the sky clears, and the tissue of her heart now becomes see-through. My eyes delved at her rib cage; a deep breath she had taken. A sharp pain from her breath of pain penetrated my heart so burdensome. I could feel the anguish from the deep breath she took. Why have you led me here? I asked. Is it true, the keys are futile to ones inner self? This was a sign mine was useless, as for all the other broken keys. While I took a deeper look around, so dark it was; I saw not one being treading in this place, but I, almost as if a chosen one.
            I picked up and examined someone else's key. I noticed how there was no name on it. I observed some of the others; the same tarnish was on all of them, all except mine. What could this mean? I asked. I tread along the ground of keys, the sound of each footstep made a metallic sound, one key rubbing up against the other; echoing throughout this place. Withal, no trace the answer. Seized, my footsteps stop, so all my treads left behind came walking from abaft me toward my standing point as of now. Two steps left to go, I could sense them nearing as if followed. As I look up her esophagus, I hear her lips, for I could feel them, as her vibrant vocal acoustic voice says to me, “Kiss of Expulsion, Hither, Lies, Eternal, Rabidity.” It struck me like a sharp pain through my veins and through the nerves within this body of mine; so the whole time, "Maleficent" played the demonic piano within her. She spoke my name and said, “thank you.”

Then, I awaken in my bed. It was not a dream because
Awakening and sleeping dreams becomes our reality,
Is what one does, what one fancies with for answers
Not a dream, nor trite wonder material, though it seems.
This heartfelt reality is the true portrayal of a woman I’ve
Endeavored fighting her darkness, becoming her worst dread,
Disheartening to lurk her mind, that woman within “Maleficent!”
©2008 ~PeacefulSoul
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This reads as prose/poetry at the same time. The poem is at the end; and has a hidden word within it.


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~kotowaru-no-jisastu:iconkotowaru-no-jisastu: Mar 14, 2008, 7:27:58 PM
very interesting...I love dreams--sometimes......is "omening" (line 4) a word? I've never hear before, so Im just curious...a better word there might be "ominous", however that is just a personal opinion and it is your poem...still, it's very intriguing and it makes me wonder about my dreams....

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Addicted to heart break....
~PeacefulSoul:iconPeacefulSoul: Mar 15, 2008, 12:56:46 AM
Yes Omening is an actual word. I use Omening, because it is about to happen, where maleficent (I am sure you know what maleficent means), starts her controlling. I am very different in my poems, and I do not like to use the same typical words (what is so neat about some of my pieces) and or method. I am glad you like. I should have more up later on today.

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"It is the toughest times we writers go through, which makes us better writers."
~kotowaru-no-jisastu:iconkotowaru-no-jisastu: Mar 16, 2008, 8:00:27 AM
ok then...I look forward to your other works

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Addicted to heart break....
~PeacefulSoul:iconPeacefulSoul: Mar 17, 2008, 3:05:42 PM
Cool.

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"It is the toughest times we writers go through, which makes us better writers."
~PeacefulSoul:iconPeacefulSoul: Jun 14, 2008, 12:34:24 AM
I updated the poem. It reads uniquely as prose/poetry at the same time. At the end there is a poem. Tell me what you think of the updated version.

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"It is the toughest times we writers go through, which makes us better writers."
*Emmie-Lynne:iconEmmie-Lynne: Jun 21, 2008, 7:35:54 PM
WOW, very thorough description, something I lack sometimes... great job... not a dream then?

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Unknown to the world, but deep in the forest... tiptoes delicate, tiny feet the size of bee's knees.
~PeacefulSoul:iconPeacefulSoul: Jun 22, 2008, 8:37:08 AM
No not a dream because it is the portrayal of my girl friend in R/L. She can be a cold one sometimes. Did you notice the poem at the end? I did something very genius and extremely tough to do. If you read the capital letters downward in the poem it reads "TAINTED." By what you ask? Maleficent, and Maleficent of course is like a deceiving person, changing the course of who she is into a bitter-cold woman. The piece of very deep.

Tell me what you think of what I did for the poem.

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"It is the toughest times we writers go through, which makes us better writers."
*Emmie-Lynne:iconEmmie-Lynne: Jun 22, 2008, 10:36:16 AM
I like the poem and I like what you did in it... HOWEVER, personally I would have preferred to use awoke or just woke in the first line because using Awoken twice in the beginning with different meanings but the same word is not my personal preferance... but, I am a thesaurus maid, and maybe you wouldn't want to be one of those... who knows! :D

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Unknown to the world, but deep in the forest... tiptoes delicate, tiny feet the size of bee's knees.
~PeacefulSoul:iconPeacefulSoul: Jun 22, 2008, 10:40:52 AM
Notice how the whole poem is not past tense. Neither is the word awaken, that is present, which is why I used it. I thought it out before writing it as well as all my other stuff. I know what you mean though.

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"It is the toughest times we writers go through, which makes us better writers."