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Love Song by ~OmahaSem:iconOmahaSem:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Other Romance > Fixed




Love sings
Hearts' longing cries
Melodies ascending
Reaching out for another song
Entwining in a blissful harmony
Chords ring out in graceful unison
Musicians find a home
Scores laid to rest
Peace reigns
©2004-2008 ~OmahaSem
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Submitted: March 7, 2004
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This is my first experiment with a new poetic form, called the "rictameter." The form is based on an ascending and decending pattern of syllables: 2, 4, 6, 8, 10, 8, 6, 4, 2. Thanks to ~ poetic-forms for the inspiration!
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~saturn-genesis:iconsaturn-genesis: Mar 7, 2004, 2:47:20 PM
Does it mean that we look for song after song to drown our sorrows and after we've listened to a song we feel at harmony???

I like it. You are braver than I to do this style

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I feel like the Gnolls of Blackburrow... persecuted because I defend myself and hated because some moron who puts up a good act told them to slay me.
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My boyfriend is like Apollo, when he smiles it makes the sun come up.

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Chibinarusegawa Shainako Foxtrot101
~OmahaSem:iconOmahaSem: Mar 7, 2004, 6:14:44 PM
The song is purely metaphorical. Nothing to do with music, more to do with love and they way we act when we're in love. When apart, our actions show that we miss our beloved. When we come together, we don't lose anything that we were when we're apart, but they blend together and mesh into a single, harmonious, peaceful life.

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"How often is the art more intelligent than the artist!"
--Miguel de Unamuno
~saturn-genesis:iconsaturn-genesis: Mar 7, 2004, 8:25:02 PM
Whoa... it went over my head complete :omg:

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I feel like the Gnolls of Blackburrow... persecuted because I defend myself and hated because some moron who puts up a good act told them to slay me.
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My boyfriend is like Apollo, when he smiles it makes the sun come up.

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Friends
Chibinarusegawa Shainako Foxtrot101
~devilspawn:icondevilspawn: Mar 7, 2004, 10:31:24 PM
Nice way to describe it :) Good experiment!

Faile

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Ilanna

"The killer in me is the killer in you, my love."
~sto67:iconsto67: Mar 22, 2004, 7:31:43 PM
its a bit detatched
and disjointed
the flow is quite halting and i think it detracts from your message
the language is right though, appropriate

interesting form though hehe
try terza rima lol thats a pain hahaha
keep it up

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Don't like the truth? Then just pretend i lied...
suture's tips for the novice writer [link]
-the best place to learn how to write
~disturbedmind87:icondisturbedmind87: Mar 28, 2004, 7:11:05 AM
I see your point but isnt love about writing just one song not continuous songs? Idk maybe its just me...I mean I like the poem I just dont get part of it..keep it up you're becoming quite the poet:dance:

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"You are there and I am here
Far apart but somehow near.
In my heart, and in my dreams
California isn't as far as it seems.
I'll be with you in spirit,
I'll be with you at heart.
You are the one I've loved,
Yes from the very start"
~me
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