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To Go Far

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July 20, 2007
Broken promises wrapped in stunning, powerful imagery: To Go Far by ~manchaliaina demands that you live the experience.
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Woman, you said you wouldn't
leave the world behind. All the pieces,
you had all the pieces in a line and you were measuring
and drawing routes, bus trips back to where
you think things start. This suitcase
on the stoop, then, mustn't be yours.


Woman, you said you'd got a ticket out
and a ticket out for me, that we'd both be
over the moon by now. But you live limpid
in the city lights and I live the same nights
and between us, we can't weave enough of a day.


There is no fading, love, and no saving.
This white-on-white hospital light
you've brought outside with you
is all of your strength. You show up against
grey skies, you ghost in lamplight,
you love your children unborn. They are
dreams, as you're a dream, as is the hand
warming your palm. There is no hand, woman,
warming your palm, you've left it behind, named
for a dream dissolve. So no one is saviour, or victor, or love.


There is just us alone. Why remove us
from the road? Why remove us to jasmine
and this melancholy star? Woman, you promised
we'd have the legs to go far.
For P.O.E.M.S

VICTOR!

I'm so not going in order, but it's as the whatsit strikes, y'know? I've written two Charlie poems and they both suck rancid petunias.

Edit: jan 21, 07
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PunchDrunkLover's avatar
this is really good.
i love the framing and the last line just makes me feel.
great job.