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frozen soul

...I'm lying on the floor of a grotto...wakening...
...everything is chilly and stern around me...
...the air is heavy...
It's so funereal.

I can lubberly stagger to my feet
...fumbling my way out of here
a sharp rock scrapes my flesh
I flounder through the narrow passage into deeper silence

I catch sight of a lake encompassed with reed plot
try to struggle closer to it
I'm leaning warily above its mirror,
rather startled to find, looking deeply into it

I can't see myself...
...but who else could be here?
...a Feline visage stares back...
...Am I dreaming?

No. This is real, I'm still awake...
in a dream wounds don't ache.
I'm terrified; slowly crawling further back...
lifting up my eyes to the welkin and weeping

"I just wanted someone who cares for me,
didn't want more, I've told you!
Why did you get rid of me?
Have I done something against you?"

I can now realize
I've become what I've always wanted to be
except being derelict as a pet, I...
...I'll be over there...soon...I will...

Just sitting there without moving
start to feel cold...oh, this icy wind
from the sky something is falling
snow...frost touches my bluish skin

by now my whiskers are frosty
I can't feel my paws...nor the freezing air
just sitting on the spot stiffly
at last sleeping the sleep of the goner.

© Dragon-nip
©2006-2008 ~Dragon-nip
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my daily bad mood while I feel like I'm unnecessary
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The poem has been modified by myself since its first upload. I've compared three different opinions and this has come out as the result. These three opinions were from the following three nice acquaintances of mine: FerengCheng, S-w-a-i-n-y and TreLore. So I dedicate thankfully this 'renewed' variant to them. :hug: All my thanks for your help again! :waves:
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~DaMonne:iconDaMonne: Dec 11, 2006, 12:40:30 PM
ohhh :( i almost always have a such feeling, so i can understand you. but then good days become when everything seems not so bad :)

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this day i'll know the window ledge with my feet,
this day i'll know the wet asphalt with my brains,
this day i'll fly spreading my wings,
this day don't see me off, i'll leave alone...
~Dragon-nip:iconDragon-nip: Dec 12, 2006, 12:20:42 AM
aw, you are so kind! thank you!

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~DaMonne:iconDaMonne: Dec 12, 2006, 12:22:29 AM
no prob :hug:

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this day i'll know the window ledge with my feet,
this day i'll know the wet asphalt with my brains,
this day i'll fly spreading my wings,
this day don't see me off, i'll leave alone...
~FerengCheng:iconFerengCheng: Dec 12, 2006, 6:17:58 PM
Do you mind if I point out grammatical and spelling problems? It's a good poem, it really is- but it'd be better if the problems were fixed up. :nod:

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Working on: Ouroboros
Major work poetry for four unit English

:star: Artwork: ~CookiesHK :star:
~Dragon-nip:iconDragon-nip: Dec 13, 2006, 3:09:17 AM
ok, I'm listening, it was so late when I wrote, and I'm not english born...:) any good fixes are welcome! please!

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~Inepta:iconInepta: Dec 13, 2006, 3:20:41 AM
When I'm in this kind of a mood I like to listen "I'm a rock" by Simon&Garfunkell - it usually helps me...

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"What is this life if, full of care,
We have no time to stand and stare."
William Henry Davies
~Dragon-nip:iconDragon-nip: Dec 13, 2006, 3:35:59 AM
hmmm...I've never hard that name...but the title sounds good.
I can't escape from this mood -I reckon- until I fount an owner to myself...
every Cat wants an owner - or more! :D

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~Inepta:iconInepta: Dec 13, 2006, 3:41:16 AM
Common opinion is that cat's don't need anybody... I hate common opinions ussually they are erroneous ;-)...

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"What is this life if, full of care,
We have no time to stand and stare."
William Henry Davies
~Dragon-nip:iconDragon-nip: Dec 13, 2006, 3:49:03 AM
So you think i'm right: Cats need a stroking hand!
I feel I need, so they need too! And you know well: as I can remember you were the person here who brings home the Cats and then find someone who can love&feed them! Am I right?

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