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All Deviations
All Deviations




The world falls out below him
For no reason he can see
So he looks around
On his way to the other “home”
A flight attendant offers soda, or water
But she is actually an international spy,
Keeping an eye on the old man
Who sits aloof in his rumpled suit.


Invisible eyes shift to look elsewhere
To the empty seat in front of him
It’s owner seems to have gone
To the the bathroom, but actually
Has just been stricken with a fear of planes
And is in search of a parachute.


The flight attendant international spy
Stops to ask whether the invisible is thirsty.
She cannot see me,  the invisible thinks
Hearing no response she asks again
And again is met with silence.
Quiet is an ink that has stained him
A murky, monotonous shade of mute

His parents fight over him
His parents fight over nothing

The man sitting next to him
Has a window seat
He opens the blind, outside are clouds
The invisible leans over and looks
He sees his reflection and balks
“Hey!” the man asserts moodily
The non-invisible has closed the blind,
So that he can be invisible again
Once again he doesn’t see himself.
©2003-2008 *Mikit-Yorinao
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This was actually for an assignment in my creative writing class. We had a picture and were supposed to write a poem that gave the person a story, an identity, and a title/nick name of some sort. Mine was of a kid peeking over an airplane seat as if he was watching somebody and didn't want to be seen . . .
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~soulwrai:iconsoulwrai: Dec 24, 2003, 2:37:25 PM
I like clever and well written

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*Mikit-Yorinao:iconMikit-Yorinao: Dec 30, 2003, 5:21:03 PM
Thanks. The international spy stuff is all in the invisible's head, which was more clear when I had it in italics to set it apart. Clever? I guess.
~akitou
~Araym:iconAraym: Jan 5, 2004, 8:57:42 PM
You can use tags to put things in italics, if you want. But yeah this was good. The guy seems to have some serious problems. It's kind of funny that he thinks that he is invisible. After all, many people feel completely as such.
*Mikit-Yorinao:iconMikit-Yorinao: Jan 6, 2004, 2:03:54 PM
Yeah, I think I'll do that italics thing sometime soon. For now I'm rooting out which poems you left comments on and replying to those comments. I suppose he has problems, but it depends on what you're refurring to and whether you think of those things as problems.

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~Wratts:iconWratts: Feb 11, 2004, 12:44:47 AM
You should really apply the italics. The depth of what you're saying here is so good.

I just love it when someone manages to put into words how cowardly man can be when it comes to facing himself. I find it a big problem - millions of people who identify themselves with some poppycock, but won't spend two seconds a day wondering who they are.
*Mikit-Yorinao:iconMikit-Yorinao: Feb 12, 2004, 12:04:47 AM
I've applied the italics where they belong now . . . finally.

Thank you, I enjoy making points that reflect on people.

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~Wratts:iconWratts: Mar 7, 2004, 5:07:53 AM
:clap:

Thank you for making it shine.
*Mikit-Yorinao:iconMikit-Yorinao: Mar 8, 2004, 10:20:24 PM
chuckle of bewonderment without point

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