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Running Late on the 6PM Train by ~RagingChaosGod:iconRagingChaosGod:



We parted ways as always,
A quick hug and goodbye.
Nothing had changed perhaps
The intensity, like we didn't want to let go.
Always opposite directions, you and I.
Opposing compass points
And different glass doors.
Every step took me further from you
As I broke into a run.

Thanks, you said.
I saw it when I reached the train.
Humanity packed like sardines,
Weary bodies and spent perfume.
A child's whine near my feet.
The clink of your beads against a steel pole.
Acceleration and monotony of the evening rush.
Breathing rushed, heart pounding against my chest.
Breathless, gazing to where you were.

Acceleration, monotony of the evening rush.
Fingers misting chilled metal.
As every step brought me further away from you
Closer to where I began but farther from where I belong.
Final stop, end of my trail.
I take one last glance an a few more steps,
Farther yet nearer, in and away.
Scent of apple and more evening rush.
A breath to hold the memory in.
©2006-2008 ~RagingChaosGod
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Submitted: Oct 23, 2006
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Came to me while I was taking the 6PM train home. Been awhile since I wrote poetry. Might suck for some people but I think my style has matured somewhat considering how my past poems used to be.

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~MurasakiShikibu:iconMurasakiShikibu: Oct 23, 2006, 1:57:19 AM
You really have a way with words you know? :) When I said you were a better poet than I'll ever be. I meant it - and I was definitely right about it.

This is beautiful, niisama. It's the best of all your poems I've read - I mean it. And I've read all your poems.

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You can't be a hero, You can only be yourself.
But this chosen one's going to be both...