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All Deviations
All Deviations

Evil Light and Shadows of You by ~darkryuujin:icondarkryuujin:





Light forget me.
I don't know what to do-
Everything runs away from you.
All these lies, I know are true.
To this day, there are so few.

Shadows sway me.
I don't know what to think.
Even threw out the kitchen sink.
Exist against my instinct.
Taste the poison I must drink.

You betray me.
Trampled to the ground,
Cover up my every sound
Don't let me come around-
Beat me as my arms are bound.

Not today,
Stay away,
Let me be-
Set me free-
I've nothing to give,
Just let me live-
Evil haunt me
Light forget me
Shadows sway me
You betray me.

Mercy find me.
©2003-2008 ~darkryuujin
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Submitted: November 22, 2003
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A poem I thought of while waiting for my water-softener to complete its cycle so that I can go take a shower.
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~sleepingGhost:iconsleepingGhost: Nov 22, 2003, 3:48:26 AM
Amazing work, i dont even have words to describe how much i loved this one :clap:

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broken but not dead.
~kaimoondancer:iconkaimoondancer: Nov 22, 2003, 9:20:16 AM
'Taste the poison I must drink.'

Wonderful line. I'm favoriting this. . .
~jadedpheonix:iconjadedpheonix: Nov 22, 2003, 12:28:53 PM
Evil haunt me
Light forget me
Shadows sway me
You betray me.


My favorite part... the flow is nice and the sound is captivating. Also, very strong ending.

Good luck with that shower thing.

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"Wear that mask until you love it ... and then die in it." - I guess I found my Iron Mask
~dog4lifedmx:icondog4lifedmx: Nov 22, 2003, 1:57:01 PM
thas real good tyler, i like the whole idea of this, its great. keep it up man

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I never took the smile away from anybody's face
~silent-screamer:iconsilent-screamer: Nov 22, 2003, 4:30:38 PM
This is great
And the short lines in the final stanza really help - they stand out a lot.

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Whatever happened to Sex, Drugs & Rock'n'Roll?
Now all we have is AIDS, Crack and Tecno.
!Pawz89:iconPawz89: Nov 22, 2003, 11:14:08 PM
Beautiful!
(Forgive me, I am not good at expressing how much I love things..)

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~I'm dodging bullets made of silver...
Shot by the ones I love~ -Pawz.
=deliriousdreams:icondeliriousdreams: Nov 25, 2003, 9:15:05 AM
"Even threw out the kitchen sink." this made me laugh in the midst of all the sad parts, which is good... this was one of my favorite poems by you. You're very talented... although it would be nice if you could write some happy poetry...

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Deliriousdreams

~ Futue te ipsum et caballum tuum ~