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The Root of All Evil by *nevergetfooledagain:iconnevergetfooledagain:





You've always been so greedy,
wanting everything you see-
money, power, shiny toys
but none of this is free.

You hurt the ones around you
by taking every share-
you leave them naught but wishes,
and you don't even care.

And you're losing more than gaining,
for "things" can't fill that hole-
in trying to have everything,
you've only lost your soul.

Greed's a deadly sin, you see,
in truth, the root of all-
pride is greed for virtue,
and goes before a fall.

Lust is greed for touches,
and sloth the greed for sleep-
wrath the greed for righteousness
and gluttony to eat.

Envy is the worst of all,
though easy to explain,
it's greed for what's not yours to take
and only causes pain.

I wish you'd stop and listen
to what I have to say-
take it all, but someday soon,
you will be made to pay.

There's a reason they're called "deadly" sins,
and soon you'll know it well-
when you join the others just like you,
for eternity, in hell.
©2006-2008 *nevergetfooledagain
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My entry for the "Seven Deadly Sins" contest for ~TheWord. :D

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~Skinhead-Budda:iconSkinhead-Budda: May 4, 2006, 6:21:46 AM
My god thats amazing. Set out beautifully, it rhymes so easily, and you use of language is fantastic!

"Greed's a deadly sin, you see,
in truth, the root of all-
pride is greed for virtue,
and goes before a fall"

-absolutely brilliant!

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Truth is the Best Human Quality-DIAMOND IN THE ROUGH
=SorrowBurn:iconSorrowBurn: May 4, 2006, 7:08:59 AM
Y'know jen, thats the perfect "Trad" poem, flow rhyme structure is all perfect. Great job!

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You can agree with me, or be wrong.

"Despair is a comfort, desire a regret."
V. Laihila. 04.
~LJRphotography:iconLJRphotography: May 4, 2006, 7:16:26 AM
That is amazing. Im so glad you put some poetry up after all those cool looking images :giggle: Now my eyes have reset to normal hehe

:hug: I love this poem

So very well organised and the structure is great.
~AusDrac:iconAusDrac: May 4, 2006, 7:29:59 AM
Wow. Not much more I can add to what's already been said about this poem.

I really think folks all over should read it and understand what greed can and is doing to us all. What a powerful image you portray and so well worded and rhymed. Easy on the eye to read, easy on the ear to listen to (perhaps even when sung ? :) ).

:thumbsup: :D
:+fav: - Congratulations m'lady. You done great :salute:

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`switchbladeserenade:iconswitchbladeserenade: May 4, 2006, 7:44:54 AM
I love the simple rhyme structure, you can almost chant this. It contrasts well with the complex subject.

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*Spamuel:iconSpamuel: May 4, 2006, 12:46:16 PM
powerful stuff -- a strong, simple rhyme scheme too. melikes.

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The Moving Finger writes, and, having writ,
Moves on; nor all your Piety nor Wit
Shall lure it back to cancel half a Line,
Nor all your Tears blot out a Word of it.
`Rushy:iconRushy: May 4, 2006, 12:49:23 PM
well I'm going straight to hell.....

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In vino veritas, nunc est bibendum. - In wine is truth, now we must drink.
~raddie:iconraddie: May 4, 2006, 1:06:23 PM
Amazing job.
I love the first stanza, and the last stanze summarises the poem quite well!

I love the flow of the poem, and how its message is so..simple.
Incredible, as always.

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~FirstDayOfMyLife:iconFirstDayOfMyLife: May 4, 2006, 1:26:12 PM
I like this a lot :) Yeah it's a shame about the contest. I was so proud of mine :(

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You acted the film star while you were still spoken for, it didn't look rosy for me.
*nevergetfooledagain:iconnevergetfooledagain: May 4, 2006, 1:48:27 PM
And I'm going to be right behind you. I'm guilty of at least four of those--five, if you count greed itself. :giggle: I'll leave it to you to guess which ones, though. :eyes: :smooch:

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"Living is easy with eyes closed, misunderstanding all you see..."
The Beatles, "Strawberry Fields"