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the concept of pain by ~mrmcpheezy:iconmrmcpheezy:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Other Romance > Open




I plan to tear your seemingly perfect skin completely apart.
I’ve spent months imagining exactly what it will sound like
when your screams mingle with the sharp sound of my blade
strumming your veins.  Countless hours composing concertos
of love and passion, lust and pain played by an orchestra of your
muscle, tissue, lungs, and abdominal aorta.


As I finally feel your blood combine with mine - I hear it.


It’s all so beautiful.  Seemingly perfect.
©2004-2008 ~mrmcpheezy
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moments of momentum.


the aorta versions.


the concept of pain.


I can hear it.
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~EyesOfAFallenAngel:iconEyesOfAFallenAngel: Oct 20, 2004, 12:02:35 AM
They're all great, Clint.
All beautiful.
All artistically wonderful.

Thank you for providing me with more awesome reading :)
<3
~BlueIllusion:iconBlueIllusion: Oct 20, 2004, 3:21:37 AM
This one give me the creeps. It's too real, which is good for you because I think that's what you want. It really illicits a reaction from me

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"There is no 'must' in art because art is free." ~Wassily Kandinsky
~tag-zero:icontag-zero: Oct 20, 2004, 4:12:45 AM
Seemingly graphic, but it paints a passionate, colourful picture. Nice.
Leenz :hug:

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When Tess had passed over the crest of the hill he turned to go his own way, and did not know that he loved her still.
=kaujot:iconkaujot: Oct 20, 2004, 6:57:57 AM
The idea of combining music with love is a bit overused to me. Scouring this place for *suture I've come across a lot of poetry that use the same syllogism. But you have good diction going, and that's what makes it work on one level.

Moving to the next.

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I saw, darling, but do lie.
~mrmcpheezy:iconmrmcpheezy: Oct 20, 2004, 6:59:53 PM
Yeah.

It kinda seems like a comparison that little emo fucks would make.

But...for me this poem isn't exactly about music and love. It's more about pleasure and pain. It's more about the beauty within the pain.

Which may be just as overused. I don't know.
~mrmcpheezy:iconmrmcpheezy: Oct 20, 2004, 7:05:08 PM
Thank you so much for this comment, the fav, and your friendship. Thank you.
=kaujot:iconkaujot: Oct 20, 2004, 7:55:31 PM
Are you, sir, implying that I am a little emo fuck? :P

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abcdefghijklmnopqrstuvwxyz

I saw, darling, but do lie.
~jazz909:iconjazz909: Oct 20, 2004, 8:39:03 PM
Mmm.
I saw the pleasure/pain theme from the outset.
It always seems to me, but then I'm always being called a creepy parasite.
That when you love someone, you want pull them apart piece by piece and mix yourselves together in a horrible goopy mass...

But maybe that's just me...

I don't think I'm a fan of the second last line though...

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So ends another session of wasting time with Faye...
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